Seeking My Sword.

Metaphysical quest to find my sword. A poem John Phoenix Hutchinson (C)2012..

Seeking My Sword

Spirit upon a holy quest,
Tucked firmly inside manly breast.
 Pilgrim burned in experience's fire,
 Escapes slowly, cautiously, deathly  mire

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A secret self, yearns for a weapon of deliverance........



Many sorrowful paths taken, wrong choices.
False messiahs preached with devil tongued voices.
The way was shut because I would not listen.
In emotional toil, lost love, I christen.



At the lowest point a realization.......



There was something mystical hidden inside.
A path to take, far away from ever so evil tide.
A way of knowledge, imagination, a golden hoard.
Stone entrenched before me a metaphysical sword.



Can I at last rise to the challenge..........



Hand grasps firmly at golden hilt.
Angels surround me with ethereal quilt.
The sun breaks through misty sward.
I raise triumphant with vitality's sword!

Author's Note

I have found my sword and after tears of sadness, at last ones of joy.

Reviews

[Katherine Enma Pineappl..]

This is an excellent poem you have here. Not only does it bring a nice image in mind but its message, hidden through your lovely choice of words, is inspiring. A favorite of mine is your last line for it really brings the image of triumph, of someone raising their sword up high with sweat glistening on his face.

Now that my friend is a beautiful image you have implanted in my mind.

Nice write :D

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Thank you Katherine it turned out rather well in my mind and I seem to be improving at this poetry lark :)

[MOON]

Vivid imagery and I like the sword as your strength to overcomes trials.

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Its such a good feeling to feel my sword close at hand.....ready to fight the good fight.

[David the writer]

This is really good dude! I've seen some reviews of your other work on my news feed, and it was always saying it was really good, so I decided to read. It was awesome! Keep it up dude.

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Thank you David. I have found myself in good form recently and poetry doesn't always have to be about doom and gloom. Am trying to give mine a positive edge as there is always hope and this is now engraved on my sword!!

[David the writer]

Hahaha yeah. I used to write horror poetry. I can't know though. My feelings get in the way, but isn't that what poetry is about?

[Sirius King]

Spiritually there is always a battle to be fought, its a great thing to realize that you always had the weapon needed to win inside...great write!

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Indeed Serenus and now I can go into battle a lot more confidence with my mind a sword and my heart a shield.

[Ahmad Cox]

Amazingly epic

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Am on a epic crusade!

[Kenaz]

I've made a lot of mistakes. This poem is brilliant, to find the sword hidden inside yourself. It is such a creative metaphor.

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

I always suspected the sword was there but it took something dreadful to happen in my life to find it for real.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

I really love the vivid visualization here!! It really is very accute as sharp as a sword you could say ;-) I also really love the picture its beautiful. Keep up the good work :-D

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Thank you Emily, Vivid visualization indeed :)

[Amanda]

Nice imagery, I really like it. I think the last stanza was the best, keep up the good work :)

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Yeah cheers Amanda I really nailed that last stanza but it need a big finish.

[gombeggar]

reads of a crusader's plight

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

That's what I have become..........a crusader indeed!

[Some John]

Wow fantastic write. Keep it up

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Thanks Some John- John :)

[Pratik]

That was an excellent piece I just read. The way I see this _ you depict how at the lowest ebb of your life after being misled and many mistakes unknowingly made, you finally see the light that uplifts you - this sword represents your recovered strength and courage to fight back once more. A very positive poem on the whole. Honestly speaking I get tired of reading poems on writerscafe that are gloomy and dark - not that they aren't good! But this was refreshing!! the thing I loved is how you successfully give a mythological touch to this piece! I loved the grandeur! The rhyming was perfect! It wasn't forced in any way - Even though I love freely structured poems, I think this was fits in perfectly as far as the rhyming is concerned. Well done!

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Yes Aaran very well understood and am with you on to many darl and gloomy poems. I wish people would use there poetry in a more positive light and write how they are going to defeat the darkness instead of writing how the darkness makes them feel all the time.

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

darl = dark :)