Seeking My Sword.

Metaphysical quest to find my sword. A poem John Phoenix Hutchinson (C)2012..

Seeking My Sword

Spirit upon a holy quest,
Tucked firmly inside manly breast.
 Pilgrim burned in experience's fire,
 Escapes slowly, cautiously, deathly  mire

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A secret self, yearns for a weapon of deliverance........



Many sorrowful paths taken, wrong choices.
False messiahs preached with devil tongued voices.
The way was shut because I would not listen.
In emotional toil, lost love, I christen.



At the lowest point a realization.......



There was something mystical hidden inside.
A path to take, far away from ever so evil tide.
A way of knowledge, imagination, a golden hoard.
Stone entrenched before me a metaphysical sword.



Can I at last rise to the challenge..........



Hand grasps firmly at golden hilt.
Angels surround me with ethereal quilt.
The sun breaks through misty sward.
I raise triumphant with vitality's sword!

Author's Note

I have found my sword and after tears of sadness, at last ones of joy.

Reviews

[Katherine Enma Pineappl..]

This is an excellent poem you have here. Not only does it bring a nice image in mind but its message, hidden through your lovely choice of words, is inspiring. A favorite of mine is your last line for it really brings the image of triumph, of someone raising their sword up high with sweat glistening on his face.

Now that my friend is a beautiful image you have implanted in my mind.

Nice write :D

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Thank you Katherine it turned out rather well in my mind and I seem to be improving at this poetry lark :)

[The Refined Poet]

this is an amazing display of poetry. I loved the first stanza, it just pulled me in and it flowed nicely.

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Yes was really happy with this one sometimes poems can be a bit of a struggle but this was a joy and I loved how the last stanza turned out.
Thanks Poet :)

[Junger]

Very creative, with an outstanding message my opinion of the first part of the poem has such strong meaning then splits into a great way towards the end, but i really like this piece

[SamanthaDanielle]

This was a really enjoyable read. Well done and keep writing like this. Wonderful job!

[Marie]

It looks as if you have found your sword, and went through a lot to get it. Your triumph is golden.

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Still some Hurdles to over come but now am "armed" better I can face them head on. Thank You Marie.

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Nice you found it within your own conciousness.
To move on to better times of life~ Excellent stuff.

E.L.

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

I had to hit rock bottom though to find it though. Am guessing it was always there I was just stupid not to realize it. Phoenix from the Flames.

Understandeble, to go to the profound bottom, to reach it, is normal, to arise from the ashes, and see new light. I guess, not stupid, just an intelligent denial :)

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

I wish Id found Writers Cafe sooner......what a joy it has been to me. :)

Yes, it's a very nice place, to express yourself, and also to read each writer, how he/she does it, there is much to learn. :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

The metaphysical sword holds a mystical power... I love this! You have written an eerie, dark piece, that I find can take root for a great story to come... Keep up the great work!

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

The Magnus Opus! :) Thanks Robbie.

[Claire Twinn]

I like the intensity and hope here. I wonder what you will do with your metaphysical sword?

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

I intend to keep it sharp by writing. I found the sword at the lowest point in my life and am grasping the hilt firmly to make sure I don't fall again.

[PublishingAgent]

John you are in fine form at the moment. I have a request please try your hand at another subtle erotica poem if you have time. See if you can better "Her Perfect Breasts".

[Leigh]

Your ability to express yourself and to share with others in this way is truly a great personal attribute, your quest to find your own inner strength is put so well inside the description of mythology

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

I think I have found an inner alchemy to my poems recently. I want to keep turning lead to gold wish me luck. Thank you leigh

[Heather]

I don't know what it is about this poem, but it made my eyes fill up with tears, the search for strength and then the final stanza really showed that you have found it. So beautifully done. Watching a man struggle with finding himself is such a powerful transformation. I really enjoyed this journey.

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Writing has become my sword.

[Heather]

mine too!! Love that you have found your strength in writing.. its wonderful isn't it :)