Seeking My Sword.

Metaphysical quest to find my sword. A poem John Phoenix Hutchinson (C)2012..

Seeking My Sword

Spirit upon a holy quest,
Tucked firmly inside manly breast.
 Pilgrim burned in experience's fire,
 Escapes slowly, cautiously, deathly  mire

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A secret self, yearns for a weapon of deliverance........



Many sorrowful paths taken, wrong choices.
False messiahs preached with devil tongued voices.
The way was shut because I would not listen.
In emotional toil, lost love, I christen.



At the lowest point a realization.......



There was something mystical hidden inside.
A path to take, far away from ever so evil tide.
A way of knowledge, imagination, a golden hoard.
Stone entrenched before me a metaphysical sword.



Can I at last rise to the challenge..........



Hand grasps firmly at golden hilt.
Angels surround me with ethereal quilt.
The sun breaks through misty sward.
I raise triumphant with vitality's sword!

Author's Note

I have found my sword and after tears of sadness, at last ones of joy.

Reviews

[Katherine Enma Pineappl..]

This is an excellent poem you have here. Not only does it bring a nice image in mind but its message, hidden through your lovely choice of words, is inspiring. A favorite of mine is your last line for it really brings the image of triumph, of someone raising their sword up high with sweat glistening on his face.

Now that my friend is a beautiful image you have implanted in my mind.

Nice write :D

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Thank you Katherine it turned out rather well in my mind and I seem to be improving at this poetry lark :)

[Jodie Ng]

I really like the structure to this poem and the tempo really adds to the strength in this poem. This is so captivating and I love it! Great Job!

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

I found my sword @ Writers Cafe :)

[Emerald Seas]

I really enjoyed this, John. Great use of rhythm and tempo throughout the write. The message is spot on and full of emotion and understanding of the journey taken by the character. Excellent.

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

The character was me :) I found my metaphysical sword in the world of writing!

[Emerald Seas]

Glad you found your sword! Great writing, and glad you're sharing it here for us to read and enjoy.

[JGIII]

Reminiscent of portions of Paradise Lost.

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Not read that but did base this slightly on the book ...the pilgrimage by paulho coelho

[JGIII]

I think it comes out better by you not reading it. Your poem doesn't read like a copy of Paradise Lost, it evokes the same tone, seems like something a character from Paradise Lost may have written. Having said that from reading some of your work, I think you'd enjoy Paradise Lost.

[kublakhan27]

Another compelling and imaginative piece...very cool^^

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Thank you sometimes poems are a joy to write and this one was right up there.

[kublakhan27]

I know what you mean, and I think a reader can pick up on that, which is a good thing when it does happen.

[Revery]

Dude, this is incredible. Masculine and strong. This is an excellent write, congratulations.

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Cheers "r" hope you find your sword one day.......if you havent already.

[rnuff]

wow such depth in this write. Really amazing. I love pondering writes. Awesome

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

thanks you :)

[Mauricio Montoya]

nice work, like how it comes together

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Thanks was happy how this turned out especially last stanza.

[Mauricio Montoya]

poetry is Art. its fine.

[Lily Mae]

The journey to the sword and the personal power we regain from finding it is priceless.. Now all things around you can and will fall into place...xo

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

I have a lot of rebuilding from rock bottom to do and its going to be tough. I have the weapon to help me now though.

[Lily Mae]

I get it.. I'm in the same place .. I don't know if it's a sword I carry to help get me through.. I'll have to think of the symbol. I love earth so usually I use a power animal which is normally the wolf. I used a pic in one of my latest poems to show my journey to self.. It's time to recreate.. :) xo

[Kaylor Mason]

There is nothing in all humanity that matches the form of etheral purity quite like the sword . . . the sword is, in its purest sense, simply the soul of al man--or rather, as I like to think, the Voice of God

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Yes am listening to my inner voice now, its appear to be taking me down a hard but rewarding path.