Very nice imagery, it almost has a baptismal theme to it. To criticize, I'd have to say there are a few words I would say are a bit too general, such as 'magnificence', 'sensation' (what type of sensation, what feeling is there), 'renewed', significance (what is significant?). I think there is a lot of potential in this poem, and even as it stands I enjoyed reading it. You write mostly fantasy poems, right? I always found that to be a very difficult niche of poetry. This poem poses a lot of unanswered questions, and maybe that is as you intended it. I'll have to read more of your work, fantastical daydream type stuff intrigues me.
Posted 12 Years Ago
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12 Years Ago
Ive been writing fantasy poems to go with my book Arise the Stone Witches. This poem although is bas.. read moreIve been writing fantasy poems to go with my book Arise the Stone Witches. This poem although is based on the spiritual experience I have each time when visiting Castlerigg. To describe it as baptismal would be very accurate and is something I tried to convey here along with the significance of the power here to restore refresh the soul.
wow...very abstract indeed. i liked the mystery and the sense of eternity and imagination...i must confess though that the last line had me hearing that music from Enigma "return to innocence" a solid write!
Posted 12 Years Ago
12 Years Ago
Thanks for review....I have improved that last line.
The mental and spiritual run and ride of mysticism is poured into this poem from the onset of the photograph. A mark is left inside your silence. You feel as if it is time for a journey through Crow's or Raven's eye after you have finished reading these lines It too stands like yet another stone.
You dipped deeply into the cosmos and it's message of all and oneness and you did it very, VERY well. A great autumnal door to walk through.
Posted 12 Years Ago
12 Years Ago
I feel the power of this place every time I visit.
12 Years Ago
How could you NOT..it's the place where thought ceases and silence pervades like an usher to the goo.. read moreHow could you NOT..it's the place where thought ceases and silence pervades like an usher to the good seats. It's beautiful..Thanks for sharing.
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