WATCHOUT FOR MELVINA!!

Do not read this poem.......you have been warned!!!! Melvina is the evil lead character from Arise the Stone Witches.

Imagine.....
Floating in the endless void.
Deathless, with only your thoughts.
Malice blackening an already evil heart.
Would not your mind grotesquely......tear apart?

Imagine.....
Millennia have past you by.
With no challenge to your senses.
Taste, touch, hear the voices.
To plan in your mind, despicable......choices

Imagine....
Released from Hell's prison.
Unto the the modern world at large.
 Intent on destruction, revenge a driving force.
Riding on the back of an Apocalyptic horse

Melvina!.....
Melvina!!....
She will drive your mind insane.
Flee while you can.
From the Guardians bane.


You tarried too long.......
YOU ARE NOW IN HER POWER!
Down at her feet slave.
Kiss them and cower.





X!

Reviews

[lothlorienwriter]

You say you have only just begun to write? A hidden talent that has come to the fore.This poem is so powerfully dark I love the the way it makes you imagine.....
Being that evil.
Top marks and worthy of publishing!
Another great character cant wait for her to turn up in Arise the Stone Roses,

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Very melodramatic and dark. Paints a mystical picture of deep character and portrays it very well. Reads well, good flow and pace.
One possible typo? Should 'Flee why you can' in the fourth verse not be 'Flee while you can'?

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Opps well spotted. Thank you for review John.

[Bell-lala]

This is lovely! I like it allot. :)

[Jolie Blossom]

This piece created an image and I could visualize what was happening. That takes skill to put a picture to words. Great job.

[Amanda J. S.]

Wow.. I like this a lot! especially the first paragraph! :-)

Keep writing, I can smell some potential here!

[JourneyBlu]

Dark, but absolutely beautiful and powerful! I especially love the lines "Deathless, with only your thoughts.
Malice blackening an already evil heart.
Would not your mind grotesquely......tear apart?" What a striking image! I am in a bit of a dark place myself right now and this piece really sticks with me. Thanks for sharing!

[layla]

This is most definitely an original. I loved it.

[Pax]

first of all its a refreshing format.
the dots adds to the emotions of the poem.
a very dark tale of pure evil