WATCHOUT FOR MELVINA!!

Do not read this poem.......you have been warned!!!! Melvina is the evil lead character from Arise the Stone Witches.

Imagine.....
Floating in the endless void.
Deathless, with only your thoughts.
Malice blackening an already evil heart.
Would not your mind grotesquely......tear apart?

Imagine.....
Millennia have past you by.
With no challenge to your senses.
Taste, touch, hear the voices.
To plan in your mind, despicable......choices

Imagine....
Released from Hell's prison.
Unto the the modern world at large.
 Intent on destruction, revenge a driving force.
Riding on the back of an Apocalyptic horse

Melvina!.....
Melvina!!....
She will drive your mind insane.
Flee while you can.
From the Guardians bane.


You tarried too long.......
YOU ARE NOW IN HER POWER!
Down at her feet slave.
Kiss them and cower.





X!

Reviews

[lothlorienwriter]

You say you have only just begun to write? A hidden talent that has come to the fore.This poem is so powerfully dark I love the the way it makes you imagine.....
Being that evil.
Top marks and worthy of publishing!
Another great character cant wait for her to turn up in Arise the Stone Roses,

[Arielle Ann]

This was just too perfect for someone who says he has just started writing! The character just seems to have spun out from the kingdom of evil, and I tell you you have an extraordinary talent in describing that.I will read your chapters too, just that too long and I need time :) bravo and all the best!!!

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Thank you. Am hoping to incorporate some of my poems into the chapters am writing or at least have them in an appendix at the end. Let me know what you think of the Arise the Stone Witches story there are currently two unedited chapters on here and number 3 is coming soon. Thanks again.

[Arielle Ann]

yes of course and you are always welcome :)

[Baby Ricochet]

Great poem. I think I went out with her

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Ha Ha ..........your not the only one!

[Otsana]

Omg!! This was absolutely breathtaking and not to mention chilling. It is very hard to believe you have only just started writing, your so good. Anyways, this really captures the readers attention from beginning to end and has no weakness of which I can tell. This is definitely going in my favourites. Thanks for sharing!!

[Rob Santana]

dark with great imagery,like it alot,good job.

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Thank you am looking forward to developing her dark imagery even more.

[paul barton]

You convey the pure evilness in this very well
I love the way we get caught at the end,
BEWARE MELVINA.....

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Thank you. YES BEWARE MELVINA!

[Mary]

This poem is spellbinding, dark, incredibly well written, suspenseful... WOW!

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

thank you ;)

[Kim Martel]

the repetition of the word "imagine" is really great. it interests me that you have a period at the end of almost every line... even when the next line is theoretically the same sentence. Is there a significance to that?

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

the periods add to the emotion of the poem....the pregnant pause to reflect on whats said before reading on

[Brianna Brie]

Ah, this poem speaks of utter control. Tis a scary thing to give over control. Yet, some secretly want to while fighting against it. The words have a power of their own. It makes one crave the darkness.