WATCHOUT FOR MELVINA!!

Do not read this poem.......you have been warned!!!! Melvina is the evil lead character from Arise the Stone Witches.

Imagine.....
Floating in the endless void.
Deathless, with only your thoughts.
Malice blackening an already evil heart.
Would not your mind grotesquely......tear apart?

Imagine.....
Millennia have past you by.
With no challenge to your senses.
Taste, touch, hear the voices.
To plan in your mind, despicable......choices

Imagine....
Released from Hell's prison.
Unto the the modern world at large.
 Intent on destruction, revenge a driving force.
Riding on the back of an Apocalyptic horse

Melvina!.....
Melvina!!....
She will drive your mind insane.
Flee while you can.
From the Guardians bane.


You tarried too long.......
YOU ARE NOW IN HER POWER!
Down at her feet slave.
Kiss them and cower.





X!

Reviews

[lothlorienwriter]

You say you have only just begun to write? A hidden talent that has come to the fore.This poem is so powerfully dark I love the the way it makes you imagine.....
Being that evil.
Top marks and worthy of publishing!
Another great character cant wait for her to turn up in Arise the Stone Roses,

[Becca Bishop]

You're writing is incredibly dark and powerful!!!!! The title made it sound like it was going to be a more humorous piece (probably because of the caps and all the exclamation points) so I was fully prepared to read about..well, I don't know. Great job!!!!

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Thanks BB :)

[MusicLover]

amazing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Thanks :)

[The Random Writings Of ..]

Oh John... When is Melvina introduced??? You have provided a wonderful description of haunting of terror here. Let me tell you WOW!!! Oh I am so sorry I have not gotten to Chapter 2 yet.. Is she there? This is like the depths of hell, your worst nightmare. This piece is extremely powerful and reading it already drives my mind insane. Yes your talent is shining through, there is no doubt! The vivid descriptions of this character are outstanding. This by far is my favorite poem you have in the series so far.

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Melvina is in chapter two.......but really comes to the fore in chapter 3 along with her coven......nearly finished 3 btw.

[The Random Writings Of Me..Kates]

Awesome, I need to get my behind moving on Chapter 2... Chapter 1 was so awesome :) Moving as we speak!

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Your such a sweet heart :)

[Ella]

Wow, this is amazing! Well written and so evil, it's beautiful. Can't wait to read more when I get the time :)

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

The poem is based on an evil lead character from the book am writing Arise the Stone Witches......chapter 1 & 2 are on here.

[Ella]

I know, I've been looking over your profile, and I had to assume she was someone from the book.

[PublishingAgent]

Ah one of your book poems. Love it and you should def include in A.T.S.W.

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Going to write some more as I go along.....then will look back and fit them in somewhere.........or perhaps in an appendix.

[Pratik]

That was dark and evil! You have woven an air of mystery through your poem to carve out an character with impetuous power. I am sorry i didn't find time to read the Stone Witches! But after reading this I will get to it definitely... Nice work John :)

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Be glad to have your thoughts on the book. Thank you.

[Tai Ryens]

Have you drafted your own character from ink or is this a resemblance of a goddess from some mythology that fails to enlighten my mind? Either way, you've a lovely character in your mind, and you've expressed her character nicely.

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

She is my own creation and one of the main characters in the Arise the Stone Witches book am writing of which two chapters are now online here. Check them out if you enjoyed Melvina!

[Tai Ryens]

Perhaps in the future.

[lothlorienwriter]

This book is great.....cant wait for chapter 3

[Cynthia Man]

You bought me shiver, I feel scared about this character you created, yet she's so dangerously attractive! It makes me wanting to read the book, although I'd never been very keen to online books, haha... But will check it out, I'm absorbed by this character!

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Well hope you enjoy :)

[Androglossia]

Hmm... I can feel her... Is this a bad thing? How bad can it be? You have been recommended to me by Kates. And your story has been in my reading list for days. But this poem seemed to demand me to start reading for dear life...

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Perhaps you will end up one of Melvina's servant slaves!!!(((((evil laugh)))) I take it as a great compliment that Kates has recommended me to you.

[lothlorienwriter]

I want to be one of Melvina's slaves too!