Butterflies in the Mind

The funny feeling in my stomach every time I think of Her my lost love!

When I think of what I have done
With hope and love I won
And the life I threw away
Hes a fool that's what they say

The butterflies in my mind
Turns the stomach most unkind
From the beginning of the day
Till the Sun it fades and lays

I cannot control the spin
It is making me so thin
As the body fades away
I must face - comes what may

The butterflies in my mind
I wish they would unwind
Then i can face the day quite straight
Forgetting fear abandoning hate

Reviews

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T..]

Again, yes, John. It is the courage to look in the mirror at the heart of self. To know honest regret and summon up the courage (as you have so eloquently put elsewhere in your writings) to face it head-on. I think the old Latin may say it best, "Veni, vidi, vici."

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Simple yet... satisfying of a write... a reader gets just enough and the end closes the verse... with:

Forgetting fear abandoning hate

The rhyme was not restricted and the flow continued without much effort... I also like analogy with this line:

The butterflies in my mind
Turns the stomach most unkind

You transfer the quote the other way around and still manage to put the two together...

[Baby Ricochet]

I was attacted to the title. Great poem

[Sami Khalil]

With hope and love I won... Words of wisdom...

[Lizbeth]

This is a lovely poem, with an interesting title.
Some punctuation such as less capitals at beginning of lines might enhance the flow.
I think in the second last stanza, last line that should be "come what may."
Enjoyed this piece of writing!
Lizbeth

[paul barton]

I know exactly what your talking about mu friend.This poem really struck a chord with me.

[lothlorienwriter]

Forgetting fear abandoning hate

Great last line to a soulful poem, if only you realized that you love her so much perhaps things would have been different.

[BIIKAY]

the rhyming = awsome!

[Stanley Wilson]

this is a great poem enjoyed it thanks for sharing