Three Makes a Crowd

Rap with a poetic, spoken word vibe.

The left brain wages war against the right
both sides of this dispute have the nerve to fight
and if you word it right, in a certain light
it's a perfect person look-a-like
but this clone isn't me, I'm alone as can be
in a room full of those who condone what I need
but i don't know what I need, I don't know what it means
to control my heartbeat and the air that I breathe

Me, myself, and I makes three
and three makes a crowd
Me, myself, and I makes three
and three makes a crowd

Me, myself and I can never come to a consensus
so could you teach us a lesson, let us know what common sense is
or should we stick with false hopes and all those misconceptions
the silver lining's there but I just don't pay attention
and I don't really care about how full the glass is
and who gives a damn about how green the grass is
and so what if the rabit's the fastest
these thoughts keep me company misery cant manage

Me, myself, and I makes three
and three makes a crowd

 

Author's Note

Critiques please.

Reviews

[Dms]

I liked the staccato feel in the verses and the refrain has a good message.

[kdpgrahi]

A great poem. I love it very much. It has a deep meaning I think. Well done.

[Dustin Reichmuth]

I love songs like these. When you get ideas out in a fast pace like this, it just comes off really well. I love the chorus. Three is quite a crowd.

[Homeschool]

I feel that if this was a song, the refrain, or chorus, "Me, myself, and I makes three, and three makes a crowd" should have an additional couple lines with heavy rhyme. This would make the section extremely infectious.
That is my one and only suggestion, for the rest of the poem is incredible and very relatable. Giving one's differing convictions actual identies is a great idea. Passion and anger, desperation and decision, these are the themes which you masterfullly transcribed, creating a mental battleground. Bravo.

[Decaf]

Very interesting