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You're always on my mind
Wherever I seem to roam
If I'm hauling logs through the night
Or somewhere on the lonely foam.

My heart is always seeking you
Even though I've caused you so much pain
You've always loved me
You're my girl forever through sun and rain.

The driving rain on the glass
Reminds me of home
I need to return there as soon as I can
Before this weather chills me to the bone.

Sometimes it make me wonder
Where I would be without your love
I never meant to cause you any pain
I just want us to get back as normal again.

Reviews

[Alfred Kukitz]

This piece touches some nice cords of a melody.

[Mary C]

I really like the emotion and depth that you put into your writes. This is very well penned.

[Lauriegirl]

I can relate to the emotions in this write. You did a very good job of describing your feelings here

[K Scott Smith]

This poem has a wonderful fresh feel to it

[MomzillaNC]

A great poem of longing and hope… of holding on and doing the work of keeping together.

Observation: The fourth line, "or somewhere on the lonely foam." kind of threw me for meaning.

In the sixth line, "Even" feels superfluous to that line. In the eighth line, there should be a comma behind "forever." In line thirteen, it should be "Sometimes it [makes] me wonder"

In the twelfth line, could "weather" be/mean "loneliness?"

[Patrick]

just adored the imagery and the wordage enhanced this piece very nicely

[Botania]

Nice poem, ...but more than words, more than looks, more than deeds are required maybe for this topic. Character is everything, at least it is for me.

[Matching Socks]

This hurts to read. Back to normal... Is it possible?
Beautiful poem John.