OH Twinkle Twinkle Star

Jus Felt Like Talking About My Star Hehe

Twinkle Twinkle Lil Star Why My Star Don't Shine As Bright As You
Twinkle Twinkle Lil Star How I Wonder How My Life Would Be If It Shine As Brights As You
Twinkle Twinkle Lil Star Why Don't You Shine No More Above Me
Twinkle Twinkle Lil Star Are You Still Looking Down On Me
Twinkle Twinkle Lil Star I Still Believe In You
Why Don't You Believe In Me
I Use To Shine Because OF You
Even In My Worse NightMares
I Saw You Shine For Me
Twinkle Twinkle Lil Star
I Still Be Looking For You At Night
To Put A Smile On Me
Twinkle Twinkle Lil Star
Remember When I Use To Played Your Favorite Melody On The Piano For You
I Saw You Dancing & Flickering Your Bright Lights At Me
Twinkle Twinkle Lil Star
Wont You Come & Sing With Me,
Once More For The Good Old Time
We Share & Smile
I Know We Are A Distance Memory
OH Twinkle Twinkle Lil Star How My Child Hood Memory's Miss You
OH Twinkle Twinkle Lil Star
Keep Your Bright Light Shining Over Me
Twinkle Twinkle Lil Star
I Give You All OF Me IF You Give Me All OF You
What Would You Say To That ?
Twinkle Twinkle Lil Star
You Still Hold A Spot In My Heart
I Hope One Day I Can Shine As Bright As You
So I Can Be You Twinkle Twinkle Proud Star

Reviews

[TheLoneWriter]

I thought that this was a very nice poem and I love how you went into the old rhyming song and changed it into a new story line and a new meaning it was well written! My only critique would be that you used twinkle twinkle little star a lot in the beginning but then you changed it to a different pattern! But great poem!

[OnePiece]

Yes a agree i sort didnt like it repeating it , but i jus had to jus go with my flow so it comes out jus right
N yes thank u , for reading it hehe

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice use of the old nursery rhyme. I like the thoughts in the poem. I agree the star do shine for us always. Sort of create some kind of hope I believe. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[OnePiece]

No problem & thank U For reading it
N yes i believe the stars gave us hope & a smile everytime

[Lyn Anderson]

Nice rhythm and timing - the feeling conveyed of longing and loss is strongly juxtaposed against the whimsical children's song.

[OnePiece]

Yes It Dose. i Like To Go Wit The Flow & Feeling I Give to it,
& yes it is hehe , & thanks for ur words love

[Lydia Shutter]

The simple joys of youth are what we need sometimes to feel comforted. The innocence of the song, "twinkle twinkle little star" can bring serenity. Lots of longing for what once was in this write. Great images. Lydi**

[OnePiece]

Yes it dose & will always do
Thanks Lydii ,-) hehe

[Hayden Bridges]

this is very interesting. How we wish for the simpler times of our childhood. Things were easier. We did not know so much and we could carry out our day with no responsibilities. this poem is very nostalgic. Keep it up

[OnePiece]

Yes It Is Very Nostalgic indeed , i Was Singing the Song At Work& remebering how it made me happy when i sing it wit the friends n family , so i wrote a poem about it
But thanks u glad u agree