The Bridge

This is not a subject people like to talk about, but sadly it is part of the reality today. This poem is ficional, I just wanted to write something on the subject.

You jumped into the water under the bridge

People watched you fall through the air

I've been haunted by the image

Because I was also there

Holding on the the railing until my knuckles turned white

Screaming your name into the night

You jumped into the water under the bridge

No one understood why

I've been haunted by the image

I've been haunted by you and I

Wasn't what we had enough to make it through

You had nothing to live for, while I was living for you

You jumped into the water under the bridge

The highest one in our town

I've been haunted by the image

Replaying over and over your body falling down

I wish I could have grabbed your hand and held you back

I lost you to the water, cold and black

You jumped into the water under the bridge

One decision can change a life

I've been haunted by the image

Your decision took you up into the skies

I walked past that place today and wished you were here

but you jumped into the water under the bridge

and I watched you fall through the air

Reviews

[Brokensoul]

Oh this poem is strong and powerful. Your way of expressing the entire episode brings the horrific image of someone falling into the water come alive. The description, the rhythm and the emptiness after the loss with nothing left in your hands to be done makes the poem a worth read.

[Johanna]

Thank you :) haven´t been on here in ages, happy I saw this

[Kenna Marie]

A month late review, I apologize.

Johanna, I've seen the similar topic of suicide tackled from many approaches. This one has, of course, the guilt of not doing more. The guilt is a strong hold and drives the narrator to visit and carry the regrets. I think you did a great job because I can picture the inner turmoil, the back and forth racing through the narrator's mind. It stirred up a frenzy of me wanting to send hope that the narrator that it isn't her fault. I miss writers that make me want to talk to their characters, so thank you for providing me that today.

[Johanna]

Hi Kenna, thank you for your lovely review.. and for really reading the poem, I loved hearing your thoughts on it. Have a great day

[Rinzin Samdup]

hey..sorry...very late to review. been busy for awhile. Thank you for sharing. Like it!

[Jake Kokoris]

The repetition is effective and heightens the tone of longing. You explored this dark topic in a distant yet personal way.

[Johanna]

thankyou jake

[Emily]

I love this poem!!
Keep it up Johanna!

[AaronFreitas]

A dark topic done very well my friend. It does happen and people get into a place where they can't find a way out. In that moment it makes sense to let go of life even though there has to be a better way. Not only does it hurt that person but the ripple affect hurts so many more. Nice work :)

[Johanna]

Thankyou Aaron :)

[R Smith]

brilliant poem, the repetitive lines are perfect for this refrain and though the theme is sad and depressing you wrote a wonderful poem Johanna :)

[Johanna]

Thankyou Richard :)

[Avinash]

Some incidents and its imagery leave many questions in your mind. I think it is the guaranteed shock value associated with it gives the thrill and motivation to perpetrate such unimaginable acts. But a witness can be impaired for the lifetime.

[Johanna]

Very true words Avinash

[M. Black]

sad but beautiful at the same time. I really liked this :)

[Johanna]

thankyou so much M.C Black :)