Little Brother

I was inspired by another song about loss

It was a september morning covered with dust

Fog in the window over your bed that was untouched

and I remember clearly when they told me who had died

The september evening I became an only child

Let it rain, rain, rain, on the earth

All these tears will never heal the hurt

it´s been twenty years now since your birth

but you weren't supposed to die first

It was a november morning when I called your name

Just darkness outside your window, you were a picture in a frame

and I remember clearly my sanity going wild

The september evening I became an only child

Let it pour, pour, pour on the earth

Time tries to cover up everything you were

It´s been thirty years now since your birth

but you weren't supposed to die first

It was a december morning when they packed your things away

Snow outside your window, but no laugher christmas day

and I remember clearly how our parents cried

The september evening I became an only child

Let it flood, flood, flood on the earth

Without you I don't see it´s worth

It´s been a lifetime now since your birth

but you weren't supposed to die first

Little brother, you weren´t supposed to die first

Reviews

[Anita Singh]

I love the repetition of the sentence, " I became an only child" and ofcourse the passing of time, years, a lifetime! So very tragic! Great write.

[Emily]

I love poems like this.
I love how it was written!
Keep it up!

[Avinash]

This poem makes you remind everyone you have lost and miss everyday in your life. Its power lies in its simplicity.

[Simon Welsh]

That last line is a kicker. Good flow.

[Saddam]

Oh!!!! Just feeling sad, I am sorry!!!!
It was very wrenching write.

[Johanna]

sorry to make you feel sad, but thanks for reading :)

[R Smith]

Just a stunning write my friend, you have created a masterpiece of poetry, the chorus is brilliant and the overall story is tender and so sad but its just a great work Johanna :)

[Johanna]

Wow thankyou Richard, so happy you liked it :)

[Blue]

My, this pierced right through my heart. I love the repetition of "The September I became the only child" and "you weren't supposed to die first." You moved me so effortlessly.

[Johanna]

Thankyou blue :)

[Ruth]

How wrenching...I felt this...grief is a powerful life changer...poignantly told ...

[Johanna]

true.. thanks for reading Poppy :)

[Mayank]

This tragedy almost sounded real. You have put really good efforts and the way you have written like it was someone very close to you.

[Johanna]

Yes I tried to imagne I was in their shoes.. thankyou for reading :)

[AaronFreitas]

Damn this was a sad poem my friend... I could really feel the pain behind these words. We always hope to grow old with our siblings... it's a shame to lose one at a young age. Nice write Johanna!

[Johanna]

thanks Aaron :)