I Bet

As always.. I had writers block and this is what I came up with, as always I´m not sure what I think about it this time either.. xD

"As always.. I had writers block and this is what I came up with, as always I´m not sure what I think about it this time either.. yup, I know, getting old.. for me too.. thanks for any feedback :)"

I BET

I bet they´d never seen anyone cry like that
In public, on the sidewalk
I bet they´d never seen anyone run so fast
You yelled, but I didn´t wanna talk

I didn´t wanna talk about the day we fell apart
When we were still falling
I was falling into the shadows of my heart
Still you pulled at my heartstring

I bet they´d never seen anyone broken like that
To the point were they stopped caring
I bet they never knew what they were looking at
It was past and future love, disappearing
The beginning of the end
The end of the start
The day we fell apart

Reviews

[Laura Harrison]

writers block is awful! but you did a great job of pulling through it :) this piece is so lovely

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Heartbreaking write hun.
Sad when love doesn't work out in the end, pure heartbreak is really hard to deal with.
This piece was very deep, meaningful and emotional.
I like the way you have set this one out.
I love all your poems, this one is no exception.
Well done hun :)

[Johanna]

You rock Cimmy! alwyas so kind reviews! :) You keep me writing.. thankyou so much again! :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Awwww so glad I keep you writing, because you're writing is amazing :)
You're welcome again :)

[Neon]

Yeah, I can feel the feelings of writer's block cus, i've passed thought it many times...lol but moreover, this poem doesn't look came from writer's block but from the pain or some kinda disappointment of love.

Keep it up!

Heyy, if you don't mind, "Can I ask one question?"
Why did you use, "Disspearing" rather than "Disappearing?" I'd love to know if that first one word has some meanings, I really don't know the meaning of "Disspearing."

[Johanna]

I actually meant Disappearing, it was a writingmistake :)
I don´t know if the word I wrote means anything haha.. but despairing means hopelessness, and those are actually pretty close..

Thankyou:)

[Neon]

Haha...you make me smile. Thanks for letting me know :) it's my pleasure to read your poems :) Keep writing!

[Elina]

Very nicely written, my dear! The only thing I noticed was "It was past and future love, disspearing" You've forgotten the "a" in "disappearing."

[Johanna]

thankyou Elina, fixed it :)

[Devesh]

This was lovely! I thoroughly agree with Amos, the last lines were just breathtaking. But for me, the standout line was this one:

"I was falling into the shadows of my heart"

Utterly beautiful! And I want the song. Yup, I know, getting old, but SONG.... :)

[Johanna]

Glad you liked that line, I like it too :)
Oh my the song!!
Sure.. I´ll fix it today.. :)

[Johanna]

I just recorded me singing this poem, made up a melody, will paste the link soon :)
do you still want to hear the other one? the talk one I wrote a while ago? :)

[Devesh]

I want to hear EVERYTHING :DD

[Johanna]

It´s all up :) on both poems, and the song on my front page :)

[Devesh]

I checked out your YouTube channel, heard the songs already They were great! :)

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What is this about a writers block????? You did great as you always do Johanna:)

[Johanna]

I just haven´t posted in a long time.. :P and I know you all read it (you always do, so kind!) So I didn´t want to let anyone down.. I just tell you to make sure you know in case it´s not so good

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Ohhhh now lol its always good, I never seen anything bad come from your heart not 1 time.

[A. Amos]

The beginning of the end
The end of the start
The day we fell apart

Great write my friend, just amend the spelling of beginning above...

[Johanna]

glad you liked it :)
could you show me? I´m way to lost to spot it myself haha xD

[A. Amos]

The beginning of the end
above line and you're most welcom

[Sami Khalil]

I bet love will pull your heartstrings and you will compose a melody for all to love...:)................

[Johanna]

I hope someday :) thanks sami :)

[Sami Khalil]

Yep. You are welcome...:)...............