Bullets

I've been dashing bullets my whole life, I'm the kind that run, not the one who puts up a fight..

I've been dashing bullets my whole life

I'm the kind that runs, not the one who puts up a fight

I've been good at taking cover but you were

So much quicker than the rest

And your bullet hit me right in the chest

Now there´s love all over the floor

Nowhere to hide anymore

I'm wide open, crawling away from the gun

Cause I didn´t want to love anyone

I laid there with both hands on my heart

There´s the smell of gunpowder in the air

While all the others depart

You're talking to me, but I don't wanna hear

I've been fighting hard to protect myself

I know the world all too well

People like you, who cheat and lie

They say love, they say forever

Then they say goodbye

You could be just the same as them

Except that your aim is better

My love is all over the floor

My heartbeat is growing slow

If you ask if I love you

I´ll say no

It´s too dangerous

I'm  crawling away from the gun

Cause I don´t want to love anyone

Reviews

[Demii]

This is really good, very heartfelt and passionate and I like this sentence because its perfect "
I've been fighting hard to protect myself I know the world all too well, People like you, who cheat and lie ,They say love, they say forever, Then they say goodbye"

[Johanna]

Thankyou! :) your so kind for reading.. means a lot :)

[Demii]

oh any day you're a good writer :)

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Johanna got some depth pouring, Hope this is just a write. Great work:)

[Johanna]

Yup just a poem, but I´m glad you still found depth in it and liked it :) thankyou :)

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Good:) yes I did I always find the greatest in your writing :)

[Devesh]

This is awesome! Not very often that we get to see imaginative lyrics and these are extraordinarily so. Iäm not sure about the second line though, I think it should be " I'm the kind that runs", 'run' sounds odd to my ears. But maybe that is just me, you should check with others too. This was a very nice, refreshing read, thanks for sharing! :) Are you recording these as you write?

[Johanna]

I agree.. haven´t notice it before, will change it right away :) thanks :) do you thing the imaginative style works? I usually get a poem as a song and I sing it as I write it down, it´s easier for it to flow and I write better that way :) Sometimes I record them, and sometimes I don´t, depends on how much time I have :)

[Devesh]

you're welcome :) It definitely works for me!Understood! :)

[max_vonnegut]

I really like this a lot although I don't know why. I was kinda expecting a more masculine poem after reading the title "bullets", but then I was like 'oh I see what this is' :)
It was a great read. The metaphor you used is great and i think you just rhyme so well!! Great job

[Johanna]

Thankyou :) Yeah it´s a little diffrent.. I hoped you´d all like it anyway. So the metaphor works? Thankyou Max :)

[max_vonnegut]

It definently works!