what is sweet and what is sour?

pain felt internally and repressed through a facade of smiles and half toned laughter what can something that seems so profoundly deep i know i will love myself for who i am not blame my faults errs

what is sour and what is sweet?

Why be gentle and be meek?

The silver tongued sweet murmuring one

Slivers with coils gnaws at the soft bones

empty hollow i'm seen to be all alone  

why was it I fell for your forked tongue jagged words all along

what i drank believing was ambrosia The Gods! Elixir Youth Life was in fact a concoction of drug addle riddled ex-ctasy which led me to my cataclysmic demise you sowed disharmonious intent and malicious reaping of your own dissent!

I love more than what i saw the whole picture which was meant to be yet something got caught and tangled up like a spiders tumble weeded web me at the centre rolling in a ghost town more than six-feet under.If it was really so wrong why do i miss you so the poignant painful un-complacent past seems to fade yet still visible the very structure i could grasp and feeling and the same time longing to feel that way back

K-I-M-B-E-R-E-L-Y

I'm calling you are you aware of this?

   

I want An Answer Back!

Author's Note

about a girl I met along time ago when (when i was in a mo-mental ward hush hush i know ha! ) well we fell in love and it seemed as she was the well the story/poem is self explanatory

Reviews

[A. Amos]

I never read anything so strong such as this piece of art, you share deep and dark emotions...i truly hope the whole world read your work. After reading such a piece one can proudly say, read a work of a genious!

[Joe_VILOT_]

thank you my friend are dark emotions mine to contest?... feeling nothing but uneasy unsettling dread yet fulls my inspiration negate decay.
The decay of principles keeping us whole united......

[A. Amos]

Well said buddy and you're most welcome...

[Tania]

I enjoyed this ! Awesome job!:))

[Joe_VILOT_]

thanks the one who is true
as is everyone
(close)
I have come across

[Rene Salinas]

The prose wanting to become poetry or is it poetry on an attempt to free itself from the confines of prose and I say this I don't intend to be analytical at all is just the way it read linear at times cyclic at others rhyming around never to be confound. But the emotion portrayed a very sincere one as the one that "got away" got a call back and the howling maybe will be heard as the wheels of destiny cannot be maneuvered by an individual will only.

Good things happen to those who wait?

Thankyou

[Joe_VILOT_]

indeed at one point might have said differently yet not so sure at the mo.
Take it a day at a time as they say.
Listenig to Coldplay 'sparks'
at the minute check it out if ya want brings back nostalgic feelings am a bit sentimental
i'm 'afraid'.

[New Theory]

You are really gifted to be able to write like this. Its amazing and the feeling did really reach across, as a fellow heartbroken writer, I can connect with it and the kind of angst in this piece. Good job.

[Joe_VILOT_]

yeah definitely a lot of angst my friend.

[Dandelion]

Wow, this is very good :)

[Joe_VILOT_]

cheers, well thanks 0)....(cheering with fists in the air)
and so i'd like to say your works are excellent as well
not a beginner at all and I think it's not really about how well you can write or even read(though i think your use of English is more than fine more than pretty good,Ace)
it's how you feel about the gift you have and that is like mine a passion to express yourself
from deep down. Well that's how i feel anyway so what i'd sum it up with is this it's alright if you feel something true and no matter how much you try it wont express itself as more than something intangible
its alright its part of the experience
just let yourself be inspired by it.