Soul Eater

Hair as black as night

A voice that haunts your ears

Eyes that pierce through light

And a face that resembles fears

Her soul, bruised and dark

She can control both the day and night

She will haunt you until you bear her mark

You better put up a fight if you want to see tomorrows light

No one knows the story of her past

And no one has survived her wicked attacks

Once you're caught, you will not last

She grabs you by the neck, and doesn't let go until it snaps

She will follow you until the end

So surrender now and give it up

Don't try to tame the beast and make amends 

Because once she grabs you, you're out of luck

She lies by the lake awaiting her prey

Many have entered but none have left

And it doesn't matter if its night or day

She always haunts for souls, she never rests

She awaits a challenge, for someone to defeat the beast

But are you willing to risk it all 

Or will you become another feast

Will you rise to the challenge or will you fall

The lake is only a few steps ahead

What are you gonna do

Because once she spots you, you're already dead

You'll become another soul in her warm bloody stew

Reviews

[spitballing]

"unable to move or breath, you're fucked"

I don't know why, but the swear word really feels out of place.

That's my only complaint. If it was made a little shorter I could see this being the opening text of a foreboding horror film. :)

Over all I like it. Good work!