Suicide Paradise

Suicide, has it ever crossed my mind? 

of course, plenty of times

there are days where Im worthless, non-existent, imaginary

I understand life has its ups and downs but when it comes to sadness

I am the king, I wear the crown

the more I know about this world

the uglier it becomes

too many negative thoughts surround my head

Im afraid I might be found dead

I can't stop thinking 

just like my eyes can't stop blinking

all these negative thoughts surround my mind

like a war zone filled with mines

my mind is ready to explode

all these bad thoughts I can not hold

its slowly killing me like a poisonous mold 

I can't hold on much longer

the pain is becoming stronger

I can't take it

I don't know if I can make it 

I hope I sleep well tonight

I awake from my sleep

to the clock I peep

not even a hour has past

I begin to cry

the negative thoughts rise

Its time....... Its time I die

I grab the gun and aim it at my head

no more bad thoughts, no more sadness, for now I am dead. 

Reviews

[C. Rose]

like a war zone filled with mines
negative thoughts rise
for now I am dead.
The above are lines I thought you did particularly well.

I like how the introduction is conversational.
I like how the middle holds such strong images.
I like how the ending builds with negatively and ends matter-of-factly

Well done.

[Green]

I don't know about anybody else, but I've at least considered suicide before. I would assume most people have unless you have the most perfect life ever created. It's hard sometimes to keep believing that things will get better; you communicated that very nicely in your poem. I like how you did it without ever stating a specific cause of the feelings, so that it can be adapted to each person. Well done.

[Joey Martinez]

thank you very much! I appreciate it!