Hell

My first attempt at an English sonnet

You string me out you always let me down,

I cannot be myself under your gaze;

The way you seem to love it when I frown,

You can see I am put into a daze.

I always hold back what I have to say,

What I can't understand is why you can't,

Simply keep your love throughout everyday;

But of course you will never hear my rant.

You love to embed me within that place,

Where I always fall and I cannot stand;

I wish my memories could just erase,

For all the love I put forth you stayed bland.

But I know I will find my peace within,

Because of where you will go for your sin.

Author's Note

Constructive criticism only please.

Reviews

[Dr. YumnaKay]

"I wish my memories could just erase,
For all the love I put forth you stayed bland."
I wish the same.. You write really well!

[Coyote Poetry]

I did enjoy this poem.
"But I know I will find my peace within,
Because of where you will go for your sin."
We need quiet and dangerous place to seek comfort. I liked the above lines. Thank you Stephanie for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote