"The Portal"

The devil's favorite demon will lead you into a nightmare of snow and death, but one you're in, you may never return

“The Portal”

By Joe Price

 

            They were on their way to Hells Drive, a local theme park, to ride their favorite ride ever (even though they've never ridden it before, it was already their favorite ride). Their favorite ride, ”The Devil’s Favorite Demon”, a ride that was perhaps the scariest and or the best ride they’ve ever ridden. If it is a mile long ride with three cork screws and four loops and goes nearly one-hundred miles per hour, that’s the ride for these crazy kids. This is the newest ride in the park and they just had to be the first ones to ride it even if they have to break in three hours before it opens. And that was their plan.

 These teenage troublemakers do not have what some would call a clean records. When they first got in trouble, they stayed in trouble. You could never find any kids worse than these. They are clearly not very bright. They were once caught smoking “Mary Jane” in the bathroom, laughing, and just shooting the breeze.

“What are you doing?” said the strictest teacher in the school.

“Just hanging around.” said Tammy. Tammy is the leader of this mentally unstable bad a*s of a group. She was a s****y red head who f***s ever dick she sees. Her boyfriends’ were Johnny Suarez, Lenny Luenbergure, and Sean Tanner. Johnny was the right hand man. He loves to break things. He was a tall thin bully who has a lot of neck and had straight hair and was also very muscular. He bullied sixth graders even though he’s a senior in high school. Lenny was a goof ball. He is the exact opposite from Johnny when it comes to body size. He is short and big boned with very little neck and curly hair.

Sean is sort of like a mixture between the two, however, he was always horny and had an abnormally large penis. He thought it would be a good idea to rape a sixth grade girl. He loved to brag about it. He’s the cockiest person you would ever find. Johnny has even threatened to kill him if the didn’t shut his goddamn mouth.

“We’re finally here, let’s go to the entrance and climb the door.” Johnny said with and eager tone. They hiked over to the gate and started climbing. As they were climbing, it started pouring down the rain. The gate was supper slippery. Johnny slipped.

“Ouch! Son of a b***h.” He yelled very angrily.

“Johnny, shut the f**k up you piece of s**t. If you’re the reason for an alarm going off I swear to gods I will f*****g kill you do you understand.” Tammy yelled at the top of her lungs. They finally scaled the wall. As soon as Tammy dropped into the theme park, she decided to get a map and look for their favorite ride. When they looked at the map they found that the ride was a little piece away. It is actually the first ride that they will come upon. They hiked over to the ride and decided to start it themselves considering the fact that they got there several hours before the park opened. As they were climbing the seemed like a thousand steps, they finally got to the ride. They all got on the ride except for Johnny. Johnny started the ride and jumped on they’re with the rest of them, but The Devil’s Favorite Demon didn’t like the fact that these a******s got on the ride before the theme park even opened.

“Boohoo! Yea this is awesome.” Screamed Tammy as thrilled as she could be. As they were riding the ride, they couldn’t help but to see a red glow. The ride leads them into the glowing red light, but when they got there, they were no longer on the ride. They had flown into a snowstorm. But the trouble was they weren’t alone.

“What the f**k just happened? Where the f**k is we?” Lenny said scared to death. Tammy saw a shadow in the snow.

“What was that?” Tammy said as if she was frozen.

“I don’t know but its way too cold out here let’s see if we can find a place to take shelter.” Sean said. They just started looking around because they are the laziest bums you will ever find after all. They saw a mansion and decided to go see if anyone was home. They finally got to the mansion when Tammy started complain.

“My feet are f*****g killing me.” Tammy said. They knocked on the door and waited for five minutes. They decided to break in, but the door was unlocked.

“Hello, is anyone here.” Tammy yelled. No one answered.

“No f*****g way. We have this entire mansion to ourselves.” Lenny said.

“Well since we do have this mansion to ourselves, Imam goes use the bathroom.” Sean said in an eager manner. Sean went up the stair to look for a bathroom.

KNOCK! KNOCK! He heard someone knocking on the window. As he went over to the window, he started to shake. His heart started racing. As he started to open the window he stopped and started backing away. He saw a shadow.

CRAAASH! The Devil’s Favorite Monster had come to life.

“Ahhhhhhh! Sean scream. HELP MEEEEE! He screamed even louder. The demon grabbed him and started squeezing the life out of him.

After several hours of waiting, the other three hadn’t heard from Sean.

“Where the hell is Sean?” Lenny asked in a confused manner. The demon through Sean down the stairs.

“Ahhhhhhhh! Run! They all screamed as the ran out the door. They ran fast, but the demon was faster. Tammy tripped over a log and saw the portal that lead back to the theme park.

“There, there, run back to the portal! She screamed as she got up and started running again. The demon shoved its knives through Lenny and Johnny. Tammy just kept running and finally made it back to the portal. She finally made it and thought she had won, but when she got there, the joke was on her. Everything was gone.

Copyright 2014 by Joe Price

Courtesy of TRUE TERROR PUBLICATIONS

A division of TTP Entertainment

Reviews

[lissalovesyou]

Interesting. A couple of typos though.
To be honest, you showed the problems a little too quickly. I mean, they were breaking into a theme park and riding on a roller coaster, but then they got dumped through a portal and into a snowstorm?
Overall, it's an interesting story, but you could fix up a couple things.
lissalovesyou:)

[LisaJane]

Very interesting story. I liked it a lot.

Some typos I found:
boyfriends’ - should be - boyfriends
the demon through Sean -should be - the demon threw Sean.

you switch from past tense to present tense a few times.