Through the eyes of the Drayd

As I step onto the soft moss I take a deep breath in, the sounds of the wind and creatures as well as the smells of the water and fresh air, berating my senses and making me nostalgic for all the summer days I spent at play. I look around as the setting sun shoots light beams in between the trees carving pictures on the ground out of shadow. I hear the birds playing in the branches, gleefully twittering from tree to tree in an endless game of tag. I look down and the ground seems to be moving and I realize under the moss bed lies a small army of insects going about their daily lives. I crouch down to observe them and I see the creatures below me working loyally as any army to better the life of their queen as well as their own. As I am watching this I hear a grunt and look to see a huge beast sitting there quietly observing me. I slowly stand and bow to the creature giving it its respect. She returns the favor and wanders off with her children in tow. I smile as the sun fades and the light catches the insects as the hover back to their nest. As the evening breeze blows through the trees I let the wind take me home back to the sturdy oak from which I came.

To live in this magical world, peacefully forevermore...

Author's Note

With this short descriptive paragraph I challenge my readers to use their imagination and define the creatures with their own views. In short, what do your imaginings say about you and your world view?

Reviews

[David Jae]

I like this. You use some powerful imagery and simple, strong descriptions. It is well done how you allow the reader to fill in the details with their imagination. I see the beast as being a large feline with a noble face.

If there is a suggestion I could make, it is that you need to think more about your metaphors. Where you say that the setting sunlight shoots through the trees, this sends mixed signals. You have the softness of the scene and the gentle metaphor of the setting sun, which is then altered by the harsher word 'shoots.'
I think something like slips, radiates or flows would fit the scene better.

Still, an enjoyable story.

Ganbare