A forever night

As I lay awake at night

Staring until the ceilings white

I picture my life in full

The one that's dawned so dull

With joy and laughter fading

I fall deeper and deeper into nothing

Can someone

Please anyone

Find my light that faded

Refill it

Renew it

Nurture it until it's remembered

Remembered the reasons it's shining

The laughter and smiles it's holding

Are all that's kept me moving

Lately the darks been catching up

The only reason I stay up

Its consuming my dreams

Nightmares don't scare as it seems

They cut until you bleed streams

Streams that flow by all means

They never disappear

Until my eyes wake

But only to despair

Author's Note

It's my first poem in a while, I would really appreciate your complete honesty and advice

Reviews

[TheHaniman]

Obviously you want to invoke a sense of despair and questioning of cruelty of the world, but i feel like you need to give some more umph. The part about nightmares could have been an opportunity for you to use more vivid details and make up more depressing scenes. However, i still could form my own interpretation and understand the sense of despair and questioning of cruelty of the world so kudos for that, just give it more invoking details.

[Jonathon Mark]

Thank you for your review, ill defiantly keep this in mind, I was enjoying the fact it wasn't too specific but next time ill meet it half way, thanks again

[A.G.]

Cool poem (:
I understand the meaning and feel on personal level. Good write.

[Lee Bakes]

Jonathan,
Thank you for this poem. I have a very close friend, who is suffering in a similar way. It may be clinical, however every time I speak to him I can almost see his pain. This poem reminds me so much of him. The yearning to remember what it was like to be happy and to keep it that way. The fear that the dark is catching up and the fact that nightmares rarely scare him at all now. I cannot tell you how strangely poignant it is to feel someone through words. Thank you for your great effort at putting down this very important matter on paper. There are so many people who suffer this way and a thing like this should be discussed out in the open so that more people understand their predicament and help them pull through tough times and darkness.
Thank you
Lee

[Jonathon Mark]

Thank you Lee, Its touching to know that in some way it could relate to you, it's a condition so many people have. I really wish and hope the best for your friend and that everything will be okay. I will defiantly have to consider discussing this out in the open so more can understand but sometimes it can be hard to express your feelings to the public. Thank you again