Dearest You;

Dear the Girl Who Stood on the Edge of a Fountain Above the Wayward Sky,

I never saw you standing there, toes dangling in the open air

And hair caressed in sea salt breeze, moon-born skin so fair;

Never ever did I witness the where of which you intended - 

Never did I ever have the wit to see whichwith your heart was mended 

And always did you I see and not the Fountain where you prayed,

You always were never whatever the Fountain was where you laid

Yourself and your always as if always was yore and not morrow’s day;

Because it was you, Dearest the Girl Who Stood Against the Grey -

You who stood in the Ways and found a place against my chest,

And blessed was the noonward day that you and I came to rest;

Dearest the Girl Who Stood Against the Walls of My Heart and Said,

Said it softly you did - said Dearest You in a letter, and then . . . 

Author's Note

This is my first submission in three years. I have plenty more to post, too. My writing style has changed quite a bit since 2010.

Reviews

[Jazmen]

This is really great. I love how its so metaphorically crafted. There's a grey-blue atmosphere, it's cold and lonely and equally as concerned. I appreciate your poetic voice, you illustrate things with a honed style and rhythm, you have a fine talent in poetry. I read some more of your work, I don't comment on all. Good job

[zainul]

Amazing work.
A song written in great care.

[creativequill]

I really enjoyed reading this, the way you structured it makes it interesting. The imagery, fantastic, and I am in love with your line "And hair caressed in sea salt breeze, moon-born skin so fair" I think it's wonderful. Fantastic poem :)

[K.]

this is wonderful, I love the way it reads. nicely done.

[Katie]

Beautiful.

[Amanda Granger]

Everything about this poem blows me away. The style vaguely reminds me of e.e. cummings and emily dickinson, and yet at once it is completely your own and tells a beautiful story. The imagery works so vividly that although one has to imagine the situation that you describe. It's very heartfelt, and your choice of words and inventive use of language (as usual) is impeccable. I also really like the rhyme scheme. The end of the second line runs so seamlessly into the next by rhyming "air", "hair", and "fair." It's both subtle yet flows perfectly from one line to the next. The letter form you use connects nicely to the end of the poem.

All in all, outstanding work!