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Is this a path to happiness? Or is it just another false sense of hope?

In my eyes, you are gone.
In my hands, you no longer hold.
You sang to me a song,
About filling a heart with gold.

You found me when I was lost,
Suffering in self destructive behavior.
To you it was easy,
A smile, a hug, and good laugh.
You washed away my cracked and broken bones.
Metaphorically, emotionally relieved.
There was something that came from absolutely nothing.
You snook your arms and tugged me into an embrace, and my mind set sail. Wandering sensibly about your actions, your words, and your main focus.

Will you understand my way of thinking? Could you cloud over this blistering and burnt skin.. Simple minded and complex behavior. Would you admire it at all?

God only knows when time will tell.
You were there to save me.

Author's Note

To all readers, give me your personal opinion. What does this make you think emotionally? Positive? Negative? Open for judgement,

Reviews

[Joshua Carl Cruz]

if i may? reading the first stanza i thought you might have sacrificed the meter to fit the rhyme sheme a little too well. in my hands, no longer held. i would suggest this since for the reader it does nothing to jeopardize the aaaa approach held and gold fit nicely together. the second stanza runs more free flow, prosaic. a good laugh goes along with the idea of the fourth line. i had to look up snook as it isn't a verb but a fish to be sure if snaked was what you meant i get it but, you know, readers need clarity so. anyway i read and read and thought about it because i think you care about it getting the best reception possible. and i liked it enough to come to care about it as well. take my opinion with a grain of salt if it offends you at all. it isnt my intention to make fun or be rude to you. in any case thanks for writing it