Seemingly Inconsolable

Securely folded legs;

I'm curled up in the chair.

I shamefully review tonight,

As I cover my face with my hair.

The light is gone;

It's fallen back behind the trees.

I wish that I were folded in your arms,

Instead of sleeping with my chin to my knees.

The cold is raw-

I slip my arms inside of my shirt.

I wrap them tightly around myself,

Trying to forget about all of this hurt.

I shiver beneath my layers-

My skin is cold and soft.

Instead of freezing in my room,

I wish I were asleep in your loft. 

I think about you snapping at me,

As spit flies from your lips.

I might miss everything else,

But I certainly won't miss feeling like this.

I will rise tomorrow,

Perhaps feeling whole and new.

I may even meet new people,

To help me forget you. 

Reviews

[Tony]

The strong emotional content works well and the rhyme scheme makes for a nice flowing write.

[Antonio Valentino]

Very sad, but sometimes that just has to happen yes?

Glad to see some hope toward the end :)
Antonio xx

[Kathryn]

I like the rhyming scheme you set for it. I can never manage to stick to one thing... Besides that, I like the poem itself. For the moment it is hurt but there is hope for the tommrow.

[Dream Weaver]

Nicely written very solid and the flow
is bar none. Great job Jillian..........

[J.S. Pua]

"The light is gone;
It's fallen back behind the trees.
I wish that I were folded in your arms,
Instead of sleeping with my chin to my knees."

my favorite stanza.
great write.

[Steve]

this was so sad......was well put together

[blob blob]

i can really feel the lonely-somber
mood in this poem---a great write...
such a magnificent piece of poetry:)

[alan khan]

so much feeling.