Slightly sad, slightly amusing little poem about temptations.
She is telling me about her husband's affair
Shakes out the paper napkin Places it neatly on her lap All the while eyes lowered As though ashamed A necklace of red blotches at her throat Belying anger It should hold my attention And in normal circumstances I would have stopped Mid forkful To stare at her, open mouthed As she describes The final explosive row.
I would have tutted At his boldness, his lies As she repeats them word for practised word Mouth forming a series of ugly shapes I would not have noticed The tiny piece of lettuce stuck between her teeth The mayonnaise that flecks her chin As she spews out his misdemeanours I would have carefully replaced my knife and fork On the just wiped table Out of deference to her pain Dabbed at my mouth with the crumpled napkin Nodded sympathetically Left the food a partly finished work of art.
Sadly I do none of these - These things that would have shown What a caring, sympathetic friend I was How wisely she had chosen me As her lunch companion Someone who would listen and support Recoil in horror Stretch an arm across the table, pat her hand. My fork transports thin slivers of ham Posting them at intervals through open lips A cherry tomato pops between my teeth Adding a sweetness to the salty meat I pause and grind black pepper Dreamily watch it fall and settle
I do care about the affair
I try to listen As her voice rises in indignation Want to be mesmerised By the revelations But the reflection in the window Behind the chattering friend Draws my eyes like a magnet
My taste buds, dull with salad, start to tingle Two large vanilla slices sit proudly side by side Pastry, golden, flaky, promises some buttery delight
Whilst its counterpart, the bulging custard filling, dense and yellow Trembles slightly as the diners eat,
Sun shimmers on the lightly dusted tops Multi layered happiness on a plate.
I think about poetry all day Jill, I mean, the pseudoscience of it. The assumptions and methods
erroneously regarded as scientific. Because sooner or later, we have to give in to the notion
that the science of poetry, the systemized knowledge of it, is nothing other than just
distinction. That 'voice' is the only victory over esoteric supremacy. In other words, if you
talk to me, and I listen to you and trust in your figurative likenesses, isn't that what poetry is for?
Like cake making from scratch, like my grandma did, the part of it that we so often overlook
is systematic plan. The patience. Having your loved ones tiptoe in the kitchen; the story.
I think about poetry all day Jill, I mean, the pseudoscience of it. The assumptions and methods
erroneously regarded as scientific. Because sooner or later, we have to give in to the notion
that the science of poetry, the systemized knowledge of it, is nothing other than just
distinction. That 'voice' is the only victory over esoteric supremacy. In other words, if you
talk to me, and I listen to you and trust in your figurative likenesses, isn't that what poetry is for?
Like cake making from scratch, like my grandma did, the part of it that we so often overlook
is systematic plan. The patience. Having your loved ones tiptoe in the kitchen; the story.
It's clever, certainly, especially the contrast between the view of an affair as an "oh, well"...well, affair, as opposed to the clearly more important dessert, and the strength of the imagery and the overall construction raise it above the level of garden-variety cleverness.
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10 Years Ago
Thank you so much for your comments - they really are much appreciated. Although I've been writing .. read moreThank you so much for your comments - they really are much appreciated. Although I've been writing all my life I've only just started sharing my work. It's most encouraging to read reviews like yours. - Jill
I'm a 62 year old ex art student, retired cake maker, retired teacher, now a photographer. I've written since I could first form letters, and love any creative activity. more..