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i hope maybe i haven't really lost my mind;

    that paper isn't always buoyant

    and ink is highly soluble.

i guess brain power truly is relative ...

 

these are probably journal thoughts

but my journal is overcrowded with politeness

as if the only person i really can't show my feelings to

     is.me.

so i'm dropping this anvil in an envelope and sending it your way.

 

i'm at some sort of point, i think

(turning or breaking, im not sure which)

 

so ~

if you could …

please produce yourself here this second …

come in a whiff of heady spice or a puff of smoke;

squint your eyes in my direction and tell me a story

for i do so want something good to happen.

 

and if i space my breaths out just right,

i might have enough left in me to last until you arrive

Reviews

[Tobes]

As someone who has always been afraid of the honesty I felt a journal required, and who's written literally thousands of letters, there is a certain poignancy in this for me.
Technically, I was once "corrected" by a well-intentioned older lady about my use of the lower case "I" in the first person. It was just because, at the time, I didn't feel very deserving of my very own capital letters. Those insightful enough realized this extra depth of expression beyond the language, and the experience was all the richer.
And I said that because I wonder if you didn't do something similar here? Or was it just a whim of style?
I'm new here, but I will try to find some newer work of yours.

[J]

Hi Tobes, what a remarkable review, full of honesty and insightful thought. You are spot on about the use of lower case letters . They appear without conscious thought when yes, I feel 'less than' and really don't care. and you are the only one who noticed -- or said something. These days tho, I type w/one hand and using caps takes extra effort. haha

welcome to WC! i'm very happy to meet you and delighted you stopped by. i'm grateful for your perceptive review and thank you. i look forward to reading your work.

[Ardra]

i'm at some sort of point, i think
(turning or breaking, im not sure which)

so ~
if you could …
please produce yourself here this second …

mmmm this poem resonates with my feelings,
when you are not so sure.. you write them down..

[Seriana]

Fitting quite nicely in my content little brain this morn. I'm so glad I came upon your page today! Your words always held a magic all to their own. :)

[J]

ohmygoodness! hello lovely! sooooo good to see you! haven't spent much time here for a while now [my bad] -- actually haven't done any writing. lol but can feel a mood shifting 'n bubbling up. thank you so much for popping in and leaving me some love!

[Kelly Scheppers]

Your poetry always delivers a comfort zone to me, a relativity that assures me that I'm reading something that's going to "stick" with me.

I miss you. I still have/remember the lovely gift you sent me of Marilyn...your kindness was always over the moon, and made me feel that way, too.

I hope life is treating you kind. I know things get busy from day to day, but please know that I'm still here, and I miss you, my friend...and I love you, my friend!



Love,
Kelly

[J]

ahhh sweetpea, you are generous to a fault with your compliments, i hardly know how to thank you. we go so far back, kel, to see you back just gives me goosebumpers. [happy dance]

and [laughing] i'm still wearing my beloved flipflops -- they spell "kelly" like nothing else ... haha. will send a msg so we can catch up! i've missed you, girlfriend! thank you for your beautiful thoughts. xxoo

[Kelly Scheppers]

...you've made my day!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[J.P. Bristow]

You always take us someplace else..........rip open the envelope release your truthes

[Sami Khalil]

A splendid read and write...Thank you for sharing...:)...................

[J]

lovely sami ..... thank you, mon ami :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome muchly...:).........................

[Adam Whitworth]

I like this one. well done.

[J]

thank you adam! :) so kind!

[A. Amos]

Simply splendid, enjoyed the read and thanks for sharing

[J]

oh! many thank yous A! you are very kind :)

[A. Amos]

You're most welcome

[Ladysue]

J. A poignant write that resonated with me. Your thoughts and emotions grace the page with great skill.

'so ~if you could …please produce yourself here this second …come in a whiff of heady spice or a puff of smoke; squint your eyes in my direction and tell me a story for i do so want something good to happen.' I love your style..

[J]

ahhhhh sue, with much gratitude i read your comment and thank you for your heart here ...