Counting Colours; a requiem to changing seasons

It is a brooding slant of light

that bends watery shadows

lengthening my bones

exposing desires disguised

as apple cheeks and frosty breath

 

steel gray sidewalks that chronicle footsteps

of left-footed imprints

licking summer off my chin

leaving the taste of defiant rain

on shivering lips

 

tucked in my back pocket

with old news and worn down heels,

the familiar bareheaded, seasonable

reasonable reason

discontinued

 

winging its way to skies gone

out

        weeping

colour sucked to the depth of shuddering

suns, closing doors.

 

***

 

My palms shiver, quiver, wander in

innocent places i never belonged

wondering, wishing someone

would add some symmetry, rhyme

reason

to the coming season.

Author's Note

This is a metaphorical political piece not meant to invite debate, just my wanderings at a low point of confidence in this country's future properity

Reviews

[Alexandria Reece]

You leave the reader feeling as cold as the metaphorical landscape you've drawn out in the lines, which is a great way to get people to see through your eyes and the point of view for this political piece. I love the sombre tone and the last stanza's flickering flame of hope... almost as if against a sturdy wind. A very vivid poem, wonderful job.

[Bare trees]

I'm not into politics but frankly I see nothing good in the box of prosperity for this country. And the people in charge are looking comfortable and safe in their brick houses while we sit here looking for more holes to fill with straw. It's a view I'm afraid to look at. Good and cleverly written poem.

[MAC]

what a brilliant piece...works as a metaphorical political piece or a lost in the beauty of nature piece. either way it is an excellent write

[Mary C]

I really like the format you have chosen with this piece and the imagery you have produced from your words

[WhiteWillow]

I'm glad you took the time to point out the political metaphors. I missed them the first time through as well. I must admit I loved it for the words, the flow.

[Archia]

To be honest, I didn't guess it was about politics until I read your note. But that's the point of metaphorical things I guess, they're not all meant to be understood simply. I like the description in your poem, it's powerful, even if I didn't properly understand it.

[Robert Haigh]

Very poetic and thought-provoking. Lyrical and lambent throughout. Well done.

[VelvetRosetta]

You seem to have worded something as ugly as politics in such a beautiful way..if not for the metaphoric meanings I would say this piece was stunning.
The ending..is something to ponder on!

[Arthur Henn]

(J) This is a favorite of mine... Your wording and phrase is to be whispered and read slowly... No debate here.