of time and perception

It was the

silence

that did me in

The tangle and clank of

blue jeans in the dryer

 

The clatter of a thousand

dreams

shaped like rock

candy ~ not diamonds

scattered across the floor

 

disassembled, opted out, apologetically

mistaken . . .

 

Yet you have been here.  Ever.

throughout

the unraveling of time, in those

defining shifts

of earth’s tectonic plates, the

holding to of my childhood belief

in the elemental balance.

          due.

 

But a crooked grin and desert sand rites

of passage echo only in dusty disturbances,

happened upon by an accidental, inexplicable

cyberspace collision . . .

 

It happens, I think.

 

So now
when I remember you

          and me,
I think of
a million drops
of rain
       in a river redirected
and

the weight
of a mountain
in
one fistful of dust. 

Reviews

[SkinlessFrank]

yes! that awful clang of metal in the dryer is somehow one of the saddest sounds there is... it reminds me of how alone we are (or can be) in this universe, especially when we find ourselves with that sudden realization of a love lost (or perhaps, never had in the first place) and then there is nothing but silence and monotonous noise...it reminds me of Poe's 'Bells' ... " the melancholy menace of their tone"

[J]

exactly --- when mindless background chatter [distant barking dogs, a lone car speeding past on its way to ... somewhere ...] asserts itself into utter stillness, the universe never feels so limitless and frightening. thank you for sharing your most thoughtful words. :)

[Ken Simm.]

That perfect line in a perfect poem. The evocative sound of jeans in the dyer. Summons up such visions from a sound. Sets the tone for set of generational memories to play with. A perfect write and a perfect use of words.

[J]

"perfection" being only a distant star light years beyond reach is truly a stunning compliment when used in the same sentence as my poem! --- goodness. i'm humbled. beyond words.

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

Nice poetic verses here. The last four lines are perfect. I really liked this...

[Forest Green]

It happens it seems at the molecular level where the effect of invisible, miniscule changes eventually graduate to the larger scale and truly become heart-wrending and life-changing. Words fly mystically around within the mind, eventually interlocking into truly revealing expressions of what went, what is missed, and when will it all be better.

Very nicely written, original and truly meaningful...!

Daniel

[Allister]

very deep and profound and with an element of sadness Time does take it's toll but it is always an educational experience keep up the very good work I wish you well in all your endeavours.

[Moflo]

The last stanza of this piece really puts a great conclusion on the story. The entire poem read almost dream like and you seamlessly flew from image to image in a great way. The imagery is fantastic, very nicely written!

[emmajoy]

That last stanza makes me gasp with sadness but its beauty is an absolute sigh of words. How different life might have been if .. how wonderful life might have been if .. how many memories are stored in words like yours, taken out and stroked with feelings that come and go, but never, never completely disappear.

You write like an empress with magic thoughts, jilly jill

[Vinod Kumar U K]

Very good poem I enjoyed it....