thoughts on a february moon

I wait.

          Patiently.

 

as his mind sorts out the thoughts

                    [that silently beg the words]

that won’t come

 

I know this.  I can do this

                   [as my heart squeezes

                   and tears subjugate my own small voice]

 

But I know.  I Know

he mustn’t realize the acquaintance in my eyes ~

 

                   Still I know.

 

         And I have saved every one of his voicemails

Because there is coming a time

when all I will have are his stuttering words telling me

                   “I love you, daughter.”

Reviews

[kelvin]

This is a deep write here for when reading upon this with a unexpected twist but that's good writing but yes we must make things right or say I love you to the ones we love for we never know if we will see them again as always keep writing fellow writer again very intimate read.

[J]

ahh kelvin, a most thoughtful and scholarly review. thank you for your heart and mind, m'friend. :)

[SkinlessFrank]

that slow greying, shadowing of the mind is one of the most terrifying realities that we must ever deal with, made a thousand times worse when it touches that close...you soften the terror but not the pain

[J]

your exquisite understanding feels like a warm fire in a snow storm -- thank you, my friend.

[C. M. Miller]

Has a moon ever shined so bright, greeting the still night with memories past, and memories of the future? We are present and past and future, in the heart of our loved ones. Comes a time, you will reply in kind.

[J]

hello charles -- gosh, been forever. your thoughts are always surreal; you see things that are completely obscured ... just. thank you

[Relic]

Wow, talk about deep and moving. The twist at the end was really emotional. Great writing Jill.

[J]

thank you, with many hugs, tim. a beautiful review.

[Relic]

Welcome J.

[Eabani]

I read this and all I could think was...."God, I Love You my little Songbird".

[J]

you made me cry!! [don't you hang up on me!] love you, miss you, D. thank you for this. x

[Distant horizons]

Such sadness in your words, beautifully expressed.

[J]

again, very kind words, lorry. thank you for taking the time to read me, muchly appreciated.

[icelandicblue]

I am moved by your words. This is a beautiful beautiful poem.

[J]

heartfelt thank yous, blue. your comments are much valued.

[Ken Simm.]

What real sadness there is here. All I can do is say I empathise but that is not enough. Beautiful my friend. Beautiful.

[J]

this is so ((you)) ken. thank you for your heart.

[Sami Khalil]

Because there is coming a time

when all I will have are his stuttering words
My favorite lines in this well penned poem...:)

[J]

thank you, sami -- so gracious of you ...

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome. My pleasure...:)

[Larry Dyson]

wonderful parting and remembrance,, watched this on both my parents...many years..I now reserve those memories ..yes especially the ones I made"extra room for"..ty..Laury

[J]

thank you, laury. it is a jarring and heartbreaking reality .....