My Vague November

My Vague November

A Poem by Kibbles and Quips

The inaudible breezes

push along my memory,

pushing me into what

can only be perceived

as searching idly.


Sifting through this scenery

pulls particular panes of me,

pulling me into what

can only be conceived

by drifting leisurely.


God knows that I've missed

this recent past November

in which I -

I can no longer remember.


Still I sift through 

my shifting scenes

eagerly anticipating

a peculiar familiarity.


For spite or fate

I cannot wait

until I'm back

to where I was


this time

That year.

© 2016 Kibbles and Quips


Author's Note

Kibbles and Quips
This is an older poem but quickly revamped it before submitting. As always, any feedback is welcome (save for the vulgar ones of course).

Oh, I tend to hold these older ones with a nostalgic esteem so I always have trouble editing or expanding them. So, what I am say is, I welcome any criticisms because I never want to change anything when I am editing them on my own. It'd help me look at them with a sober, objective mind.

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The combination of alliteration and rhyme really help this run smooth. You chose your words successfully as far I'm concerned. I usually don't suggest anything unless I see something that hits me as rough or wrong. I see none of that here.

A great poem to read. :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Kibbles and Quips

6 Years Ago

I just saw this review! Sorry I did not comment sooner, Relic!

But thank you so much.. read more



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This is a very, very good work, in my opinion bordering almost on brilliance at some points
"peculiar familiarity", I love that.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Kibbles and Quips

6 Years Ago

Hello, again! Thanks for reading this as well! This is one that I come back to every now and then; t.. read more
The combination of alliteration and rhyme really help this run smooth. You chose your words successfully as far I'm concerned. I usually don't suggest anything unless I see something that hits me as rough or wrong. I see none of that here.

A great poem to read. :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Kibbles and Quips

6 Years Ago

I just saw this review! Sorry I did not comment sooner, Relic!

But thank you so much.. read more
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Thoughtful and softly, smoothly reading piece. The flow is great, it really eases one into the depths of your thinking. I wouldn't change anything either. Very nice.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Kibbles and Quips

8 Years Ago

Thank you very much. This is an older one but I do like this poem, but more so its potential, not ne.. read more
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8 Years Ago

You're welcome. I think as an author you consistently think alike... Potential is good word to descr.. read more
Pulls particular panes of me...I really appreciate the prose...like drifting...into a soft thought process..
I agree with Mr Lopez...
Reminds me of a story by Camus..."The Stranger"..
Very Well Done!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Kibbles and Quips

8 Years Ago

I just read the first couple paragraphs from a PDF I found. So far, I really enjoy it. I'll try and .. read more
My friend, this was haunting and smooth.there is something here that I just can't put my finger on. I m not sure if it's your writing style , your delivery, the structure or your strategically placed rhyming or perhaps the lovely balance and combination of them all but I found this to be flawless...inspiring even. You set an example of what is possible in writing.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Kibbles and Quips

8 Years Ago

Wow, that is quite the series of compliments! Thank you very much! I still believe there is much to .. read more
The title very well suits the poem.
I liked these lines:
Sifting through this scenery
pulls particular panes of me,
pulling me into what
can only be conceived
by drifting leisurely.
We all have those days when we look back into our past. Memories sometimes tend to become vague.
A nice write. And November is approaching !
I also liked these last two verses....
For spite or fate
I cannot wait
until I'm back
to where I was

this time
That year.

These sums up this poem beautifully !! Keep writing.


Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Kibbles and Quips

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your kind words! I do really like those last lines as well so I am quite happy.. read more

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