Chapter 1

 

It began many years ago, on my first day of kindergarten. It started out like a normal day for any five year old child on their first day of school. My mom woke me up before the sun came up and helped me get ready for the day while my dad cooked pancakes for me and my brother. Before I knew it, my dad had left for work and my mom was driving my brother and me to school.

 

“Evan... Whats school like?” I asked my older brother, who was sitting in the front passenger seat. “Why do you want to know? You scared?” Evan asked me as he turned around in the seat to look at me. “I'm not scared!” I exclaimed loudly. “Evan, leave your sister alone. Layla calm down.” Mom said as we neared the school. “Yes, Mom.” Evan and I answered I together as Mom parked the car in front of the elementary school office. “Evan, make sure Layla doesn't get on the wrong bus in the after noon.” Mom said as we got out the car. After making sure we didn't leave anything in the car, Mom locked the door. Then Mom and I walked Evan to his classroom.

 

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Once we reached my classroom, Mom shook hands with my teacher, Mrs. McMullen. As they exchanged words I looked around the classroom. There were so many different people my age goofing off and making friends. And I suddenly felt scared and nervous. Turning to my mom, I pulled on her coat sleeve to get her attention. “Momma, I wanna go home.” I said as a few tears rolled down by my face. My mom knelt down in front of me. “You'll be fine, Layla. Just go inside and make some friends.” She said as she hugged me.

 

Looking over her shoulder I spotted two boys sitting down on a red mat. “Now, I have to go to work, sweetie. I'll see you at home.” Mom said before she stood and nodded to Mrs. McMullen. Then she looked down at me and smiled as Mrs. McMullen took my hand and led me into the room, while my mom had turned to go back to her car.

 

I was startled when I realized that Mrs. McMullen was leading me over to the two boys I had spotted before. “Scott. Andy. This is Layla. Will you two help me make her feel welcomed?” She asked with as smile and both boys nodded. “Yes, Mrs. McMullen.” They said in unison before she let go of my hand and went to greet another parent.

 

Scott had brown hair that was many shades darker than my own. His eyes reminded me of a chocolate sucker, though it was kinda hard to seem them behind his thick glasses. While Andy had bright blond hair and blue-green eyes that could easily be seen behind his glasses. “Hi...” I said quietly and they just looked at me as I tried not to squirm under their gazes. “Hi.” They both said before they turned away and went back to talking, probably having had decided to ignore me. Before I could say anything else, Mrs. McMullen shut the classroom door. “Class is starting! Find a seat on the colored mat!” She said as everyone ran and sat down while looking up at her.

 

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Before I knew it, it was time for lunch. So I ran and grabbed my lunch box as we lined up in abc order. Mrs. McMullen lead us to the lunch room and showed us what group of tables we were supposed to sit at.  I found myself sitting down next to Scott, who took one look at my lunch box before he laughed. "You into the Sidewalk Girls? They suck!" "No they don't!" I argued as we glared at eachother, before we both turned away to eat our lunches.

 

Once I had finished eating, I put my trash back into my lunch box. "Midget!" Scott laughed loudly. "Am not!" I argued. "Yes your are! No one's as short as you!" He exclaimed with a grin. I was furious. "I'm not short! You're just tall!" I countered as he laughed.

 

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Now it was time for us to go home, so Mrs. McMullen led us to the buses, making sure we each got on the right ones. When I had gotten onto my bus, I easily spotted Evan, but Mr. Mack, the bus driver, made me sit in the front. My day was not going very well at all. The entire way home the girls I was sitting with kept trying to push me out the seat and when I fell into the aisle, Mr. Mack yelled at me even though it wasn't my fault.

 

When it came time for me and Evan to get off, Evan tapped me on the arm so that I'd get up and follow him. As we ran down the driveway, the front door opened and Mom stepped out and asked me about my day. She took my backpact as I told her everything. She fixed me a small snack and some tea as Evan told her about his day, before he sat down at the table and started on his homework while he ate his snack.

Author's Note

Well... What do you think about it so far?

Reviews

[courtney]

i like the story and love the names evan and layla? lol nice kayla anyway i did see somthing that you might want to change

think glasses- thick glasses is wat i think you ment unless his glass have there own mind and think lol
lead us - i believe this should be led not lead
i'm enjoying your story so far and can't wait to see what happens next.

[Chris]

The story is really good so far; I'm still hooked onto it and I can't wait to read more. A couple things though. First, mom is only capitalized when the narrator is talking about their own mom and there isn't a my in front of it. So when you put a my in front of mom, capitalization isn't necessary.

"While Andy had bright blond hair and blue-green eyes that could easily be seen behind his glasses."

This is a fragment. It can be fixed though if you just get rid of "while." It's your choice how you want to revise it though. There were also a few typos here and there that were easily noticeable. I'm sure you would be able to catch them if you went back and read through it.