Now That You Broke My Heart

Now That You Broke My Heart

I’m crying and grieving,

Grieving for this heart feels nothing but hurt

But there you are,

Acting like you don’t me

 

What did I do for you to hurt me this so bad?

So bad like the way I want you so much

Can you tell me why?

Why you chose to break my heart

 

Didn’t you even notice?

Notice that I’m going to hurt,

This hurting that I just can’t hold any longer

That’s why I’m here,

Crying alone in my bed

 

If you could just see and feel me,

See that I’m crying a river of tears

Feel that I’m dying in this pain,

Pain that you brought to my heart

Now that you broke my heart.

 

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Awards:

Amazingly Epic

Jun 2, 2011

• Sad Poetry
• Now That You Broke My Heart

Awesome-tastic Poem

Jun 3, 2011

• Cry Me A River
• Now That You Broke My Heart

7th place - Now That You Broke My Heart

Reviews

[Zackery Alan Daley]

If this poem was not a genuine feeling, I would probably dislike it. It is quite repetitive and cliche, but is greatly out shined by an author's insides spilling into their own work. Very good in that aspect and I commend you for your honest portrayal.

[Jas Alejandrino Ramos]

thank you for that honest critic! :)

[rielovella]

very nice and i can totally relate to it.. actually most of the people can relate... good job!

[Sweet & Tender Hooligan]

I like the last two stanzas a lot. Those two stanzas are worded powerfully. I'm not so sure about the first two stanzas though. I mean the opening doesn't grab the attention of the reader. The hurt and emotions are expressed very well in your poem. However to high-then the effect of the poem and make it more interesting you need a more introspective and intriguing opening line. That said I don't mind the repetition of the piece and you express your feelings well and your wording is very good.

[Kesha]

This was pretty good! :) I could at one point agree with this piece here! and it did hurt and this was a good way to vent :)

[sentimental~ galore]

personal emotion is evident in this poem, or atleast deep emotion is evident...but i wish there was more, it seems a bit repetitive.

[The Doctor]

Very good. I have had a similair situation, which I think all of us have some time in our life. People do leave and think we'll get over it and this poem did a very good job illustrating that. Very good.

[Solitary Dreamer]

I used 2 feel the exact same way but trust me, you'll find someone new who will mend tht broken heart. ^_^

[MarcoftheBeast]

pain and misery,love's company...so sad.but very well done.great write.

[Cynthia]

Really, a broken heart without getting a answer on this break is truly heart breaking! Its just... how things ends up, always, in these days. People just go away without a reason, not being responsible! I hate it happening, don't they notice how they break people's heart?

Overall, I think its a deep, heart breaking poem, love it much. A Beautiful piece of write as well

[Weasley]

Nice. I really like this one

[Kelsie Eileen Stark]

Very emotional- provoking thoughts here- trying to get us to feel your pain....beautiful~