Now That You Broke My Heart

Now That You Broke My Heart

I’m crying and grieving,

Grieving for this heart feels nothing but hurt

But there you are,

Acting like you don’t me

 

What did I do for you to hurt me this so bad?

So bad like the way I want you so much

Can you tell me why?

Why you chose to break my heart

 

Didn’t you even notice?

Notice that I’m going to hurt,

This hurting that I just can’t hold any longer

That’s why I’m here,

Crying alone in my bed

 

If you could just see and feel me,

See that I’m crying a river of tears

Feel that I’m dying in this pain,

Pain that you brought to my heart

Now that you broke my heart.

 

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Awards:

Amazingly Epic

Jun 2, 2011

• Sad Poetry
• Now That You Broke My Heart

Awesome-tastic Poem

Jun 3, 2011

• Cry Me A River
• Now That You Broke My Heart

7th place - Now That You Broke My Heart

Reviews

[Zackery Alan Daley]

If this poem was not a genuine feeling, I would probably dislike it. It is quite repetitive and cliche, but is greatly out shined by an author's insides spilling into their own work. Very good in that aspect and I commend you for your honest portrayal.

[Jas Alejandrino Ramos]

thank you for that honest critic! :)

[Jill Wallflower]

This so ggod, so well written and so sad. You know it's good by the fact I got sad reading it. good job :)

[Jas Alejandrino Ramos]

thank you! :)

[Ruth]

To voice the heart, is never easy love, you have done so really well! To execute the stress of turmoil in the heart, well......you have rendered the reader moved! xx

[Jas Alejandrino Ramos]

thank you! :)

[Short.Nerd]

Very good!

[Stripes]

It was a little... off. I understand, it's all your emotions running together and not coming together quite right. Or that's how it felt. There was a chunk of too cliche-ness and repetitive, but the emotions were great.

[Lost~In~Thought]

if these are your feelings that you were writing, then great job. if not, then idk. the first two lines were ok. but they werent attention grabbers. nonetheless, the last stanza was my favorite when you actually put in a metaphore "im crying a river of tears" this gives us a clear picture of what has happened and what you may be feeling/going through. keep it up :)

[Jonathan De Elvira]

too much of this could make one heart turn heartless...

[Arabdha]

very sad and poignant..nevertheless a great write!

[Abbie]

aw thats really sad that some one broke your heart great write

[Alicia™]

Aw, this is a sad poem… I think the length of this is perfect, too. Good job!

[Kelley Quinn]

I know the feeling..If this is about you, i hope it gets better! good poem. a lot of emotion