Alright With Me

Alright With Me

I’m like a child without a clue

Clueless of what you did to me

Like a thief in the night

That has stolen my heart

And I can’t control my eyes around you

 

It feels like war when I look at you

But it feels like heaven when you look at me

I say to start but you start to go

Now I’m on a run chasing you

 

I say you put your best foot forward

‘Cause here I am now

Running for your love,

Love that keeps my heart beating fast

 

Will you believe in what I said

Come next to me so that you can feel,

Feel that I’m falling for you

But will not fall on the floor

And will keep knocking on your door

‘Til you open your heart to me.

Reviews

[ForTheWorld]

Feel that I’m falling for you

But will not fall on the floor...i love this two line LOL...can't laughing with this lines, but actually or i should say honestly, this two line intrigue my heart for something i don't know..nice poem, one that could deeply touch its readers heart..

[Tate Morgan]

very nice

[Rach]

this is a rello good poem, i can feel the emotions coming through the poem. As well it is open an honest telling your love of how much you love them.

[Marie Harrison]

Bet it felt good to get this off of your chest! Great job.

[Tala]

it's not bad. I mean Its alright but not amazing, I hate love poems or whatever so I suppose I'm a little biased. :/

[Arya_the_elven_lady]

Oh wow! So honest, open, and loving. Shows what real love is.

[Kesha]

So touching and honest and so open, a wonderful read and an even better write! Such great words used here in to context! I love this! :)

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I like this poem because it's written creatively with thought..not just feelings put on paper..well done

[J. R.]

Poignant and honest. A very enjoyable read.

[Cassiopia Summers]

Wonderfully sweet. (: No matter what I'll knock on your door to show you I love you so you can open your heart to me, classic.

[Geralyn Miller]

Lovely, worth some corrections in your English idiom.

First verse, last line, delete the word "keep",, it will read more smoothly. Last verse. first line, delete "of", makes it clearer. Fourth line, innstead of "But will not fall on the floor", try "Not falling to the floor". Fifth line, change "will" to "I'll" or "I will".
Hope you don't mind, your poem is good and worth the time to polish.