A heartbreaking read with a defiant and almost uplifting ending. In the sense that they can hurt you but they can't ruin your spirit and despite all the hurt you still love them and life. That's a powerful and thought provoking ending. This piece is very good however I'd try working on opening your poems with more intriguing and unusual opening lines. Rather than saying in the opening line 'Tears fall or I am grieving or weeping. Let the rest of the poem say that in the emotions you express later in the poem. You need a less obvious opening. That said you write well.
sometimes it's really difficult to heal the broken heart, to erase the perpetual wounds... Nothing still for us, but God... will our pleas cure us someday!
heart-warming poem... full of emotions :)
well-done
i like it
i felt the sadness and despair
the words connected to my heart
maybe because i have felt this way at one point
this darkness and loneliness were the deepest and most unwanted
it is brave to delve in and face them
we find so much strength and a potential to love ourselves
by not waiting for another to validate us
this writing was heartfelt.
All the hurting..........and how easily hurt our sensitive souls become..........but we must find strength in ourselves to rise up and fly.........very emotional write, sorrowful, and something that takes time to put to rest and try to heal.
That's the worst. When someone hurts you but you still love them because you think you can change them. Or that your love will show them how to love. Ahhhh, FREAKING awesome job. It seems like everyone hurts everyone else. Maybe we should all stop communicating. Hahaha wouldn't that be nice.
Loooove it. :).
A bit outside my usually topics for just random reading, but still a wonderfully written piece. One or two small wording issues that could be addressed, but they may also be there for the jarring effect they produce so I will refrain from pointing them out. Overall, a solid piece that is neither good nor bad - it almost seems like you just kinda jotted this one down meaning to come back to it later.
I definitely like this one. Movement and fluency is excellent. It seemed more sentence than just fragments. It flowed nicely. Consistency in the stanzas -- no moments where it was extremely bad or extremely good, and it might seem like it's a disappointment to you that you had no extremely amazing moments, but consistency is what I look for and you hit it right on the spot. Overall, the poem was great throughout. Nice job.
PBP
The story of someone who is broken....at their lowest. We all get this way at times....where we feel we should just give up. But NEVER give up.... "There is always sunshine behind each storm" You may have heard this from me...but I live by this. Stay strong...reach within yourself and keep pushing forward.