All The Hurting

Tears fall from my eyes

I just can’t help it anymore

I am rejected and neglected,

Feels like my heart has been broken,

Has been abused and damaged in all the hurting

 

All this burden in life

All this loneliness,

Loneliness that is too much for me to take,

That if I take it I might get insane,

Insane in all the pain that this heart is feeling

 

Please help me God

I am torn apart inside

As time goes by,

And as people pass by and hurt me,

People that I still love even in all the hurting.

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Awards

Painful

Oct 9, 2010

• SICKNESS
• All The Hurting

Fifth - Amazing

Nov 17, 2010

• Hurting The One You Love
• All The Hurting

Third Place

Nov 29, 2010

• Dark Love Poem
• All The Hurting

runner-up voter preferred love poet

Mar 7, 2011

• Can love be real?
• All The Hurting

Was tearing up. 2nd

Mar 17, 2011

• Make Me Cry.
• All The Hurting

Reviews

[Sweet & Tender Hooligan]

A heartbreaking read with a defiant and almost uplifting ending. In the sense that they can hurt you but they can't ruin your spirit and despite all the hurt you still love them and life. That's a powerful and thought provoking ending. This piece is very good however I'd try working on opening your poems with more intriguing and unusual opening lines. Rather than saying in the opening line 'Tears fall or I am grieving or weeping. Let the rest of the poem say that in the emotions you express later in the poem. You need a less obvious opening. That said you write well.

[CountNicholasAlti]

I feel that this needs to be elaborated upon. It seems to be a piece for general emotions which is not what a poet should aim for, make each piece your own, every emotion your own as if nobody shares those feelings with you, then and only then can the true audience relate with you. Tell us why you are hurting, what you really feel when these people you care about hurt you, make the reader feel your pain, not just read it.

[Jane Doe]

:) I loved it short but veri emotional it's a kind of its own :)

[Shawn Pfister]

It makes me want to give you a hug and tell you it will all get better. I'm good at lying like that.

The line "That if I take it I might get insane." Maybe try "go insane" instead. You've got 5 awards here arguing with me, but it seems like it would flow better.

[KAREN]

Nice job! You really can feel the pain and the dreadfulness of it hen you read this poem!

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I think this was very sad and painful. I think this was very dark. I could feel the emotions though. I know pain is hard to deal with. Loneliness I know how you feel as well. I think this was good though. Thanks for sharing.

[Amy]

Beautifully expressed and well structured. I like the flow and the feel I can somewhat relate to this I enjoyed reading it well done

[Dalebear]

Wow..... what a powerful write the pain is bleeding out the poem I felt so sad reading it like my heart being crushed

Well done

[Voice11]

I like especially the second stanza where the last word will become the first in the next sentence. Is "thorn" supposed to be "torn" though? This sounds like it would be a very intense spoken work piece. I like it.

[Periac]

very good example of hurting....unfortunate yet true throughout