Thinking Of You

Lying in my bed,

Hugging tightly my pillow,

Pillow that I wish was you

Can’t stop thinking of you

You made me crazier for you

 

Sitting in the couch while watching TV,

Watching your favorite show,

Thinking that it is you I’m watching at,

Watching you doing your thing,

Thing that I love most in you, you make me happy

 

Standing while looking at our picture,

Picture that I framed,

Framed with love of you,

Love of you that made me thinking of you,

Thinking of you always.

Reviews

[trishalvarma]

Hey, returning the favor =D

I love "pillow that I wish was you", I believe many people can find themselves in a position where they miss someone a lot.

"Standing while looking at your picture" should be changed to: standing while looking at our picture. ~ That way it will give a thought to the reader that both subject were together. Also it depicts the scenario that the subject is standing at and art gallery looking at the picture.

[Dionysios]

Very powerful flow coupled with true simplicity and emotional realism.
Well done!

[Lawrence Taylor]

Your signature style is unique in your way of using the last words of particular lines to segue as the beginning to the next line and a separate idea, bravo signore.

[Crinkle°]

we all know this feeling, it's universal, and you've said it in a beautiful simple way.

[Jas Alejandrino Ramos]

thank you to all who reviewed my poem:)

[the in between]

i've done that before with my pillow too :( and stared at pictures.. beautiful poem it makes me remember..

[My Fair Lady]

Longing to be with someone when they aren't there. Bitter sweet isn't it.

[Crow]

Great verbal imagery representing one of the worst of human feelings, loss.

[M.Kilani]

quit simple yet honest, a true yearning for simple joyous moments, great emotions, yet the formation of the poem needs a bit more work.
still, it's nicely written, well done

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Very recognizable, very honest. Keep on writing! I'm sure gonna read more of your work!