Thinking Of You

Lying in my bed,

Hugging tightly my pillow,

Pillow that I wish was you

Can’t stop thinking of you

You made me crazier for you

 

Sitting in the couch while watching TV,

Watching your favorite show,

Thinking that it is you I’m watching at,

Watching you doing your thing,

Thing that I love most in you, you make me happy

 

Standing while looking at our picture,

Picture that I framed,

Framed with love of you,

Love of you that made me thinking of you,

Thinking of you always.

Reviews

[trishalvarma]

Hey, returning the favor =D

I love "pillow that I wish was you", I believe many people can find themselves in a position where they miss someone a lot.

"Standing while looking at your picture" should be changed to: standing while looking at our picture. ~ That way it will give a thought to the reader that both subject were together. Also it depicts the scenario that the subject is standing at and art gallery looking at the picture.

[Count Humilus]

Simple. To the point. I like this.

[Adelia Alighieri]

It so describes me. I love it. Simply.

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

Time comes when love is all you have..and perhaps that is all you had.

[Senseless whatever]

This is good. I like the form you use in this. the slight overlapping of thought helps lead the reader down your path of desire and longing. Few grammatical mistakes but that is easily fixed. Good job.

[VioletRose]

I like this poem. It counfused me at first! but I like it!

[Poetry Girl]

i absolutely positively love love loved this poem completely!! i know how you feel when you write these things. i liked this sooo much, i dont think you understand haha :) this was so well written and had a great rhythm. im going to favorite this. wow! im also going to read it again :) man, i just really liked it. i cant wait to read more of your writtings. hopefully, they'll be as good as this one. well done for sure!

[Forever Mine]

This could be obsession, but its not quite there yet, if you added in a line like " I watch her every move " or something like that it would be. Anywho enough about that, this was excellent and entertaining.

[Erin]

This one is gooooood.
I enjoy the expansion of everyday things into something much more...philisophical and astronomical in a sense. It's going in my library. Good job.
PBP

[Boantlers]

Fav Tv shows are always good things to share...MASH!!!! Can't wait to watch that wifya