Still In To You

You made me cry, runaway and just left me,

Left me because I loved you,

I loved you but you didn’t loved me,

A love from you that I will never get

 

You push and push me away,

Away from your love and your heart,

Your heart that has captured mine but didn’t yours,

And just sours the sweetness I’m giving to you

 

I’ll stand by you every time you fall down,

I fall down every time you fall down

Now I wish it was all about us,

Us that is just an illusion

 

Magic potion, love potion, I don’t know what potion it is

I don’t know what potion you spilled in my heart

That no matter what you do to me, I’m still in to you,

You that is always in and never been out.

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Awards

*sob*

Oct 19, 2010

• Love Me
• Still In To You

 

Reviews

[Eka]

Okaii, well the meaning behind the poem is beautiful. But, the poem as a whole feels a little choppy. Maybe if you move some words here and there the flow will become great. Also, in the fourth stanza, first line, "is it" should maybe be changed to "it is." There is a lot of parallelism in this poem, not that that particular use of figurative language is bad but in this poem's case it hinders the emotions rather than them. Other than these things this was a great poem but a little revision can always help. :)
♥E

[luciddreamer]

Good powerful write :)
Peace
Robin

[Dana Kathryn]

I understand this poem well,But we must move on,for our sake,for our health..This is very pure with great emotion! :)

[Walter Scott Morrison]

I hate the feeling of being shut out. It's the one thing that you wish wouldn't happen. I'd rather be hated.

[Matthews Reggie]

powerfully perfect.... enjoyable....

[deeps]

This is such a powerful write here.
I enjoyed this write alot.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

strong expressive write ~

[Jonathan De Elvira]

sounds like this guy was crazy with this one particular girl...and...idk, made me feel like this girl doesn't deserve him at all......

my reason.....she's a heart breaker...wonder if this guy could separate his feelings to 20/80?.....
well written....put some depth to your writings and this could a be very emotional....

[Hello, Goodbye]

great one here..

[Closedown]

"I loved you but you didn’t loved me" tense? Other than that it's really good!