Call Me Maybe

I let my heart fall for you girl

But you just let it fell

And now I fell in my bed

‘Cause you’re now in my head

 

I know it’s hard to resist

Every smile is a kiss

And now I’m kissing you in the lips

But that was just a dream

 

I woke up to that dream

Saw you looking at me

Asking me to move closer

Closer to your chair

 

And now you ask for my answer

But now I beg for your number

Is it true or is it real?

You said yes and I was thrill

 

I let you copy all my answer

But you gave me not a single number

And now my heart beats faster

‘Cause I was caught by my teacher

 

Then I said I was the cheater

And now I’m grounded in the cr

Cleaning all the dirt that you brought me

Now you act like you don’t know me

 

I gave you my number

Wrote it down on the tissue paper

Asking you to call me later

But you said I’ll call you maybe

And I now I’ll be happy if you call me maybe

 

Reviews

[Emunah June.]

That was cute c:

I love how you took the meaning of the song and made it your own! It shows how geniusly you're able to craft your own belongings out of things others have already done. Very nicely done.

I like the idea of writing a phone number on a tissue paper. For some reason, it gives me a very poetic visual. It helps me to remember you poem easier because of how different your approach was. I like that!

I love the story of the poem too. Guy loves girl, treats her like a princess, ends up getting in trouble for it, and yet still loves her unconditonally. Very nice!

All in all, a very well rounded read, and I liked it very much c:

[Jas Alejandrino Ramos]

thank you! :)

[TL Boehm]

Cleaning all the dirt that you brought me
Now you act like you don’t know me

Romance is a fickle thing. Nicely penned

[Jas Alejandrino Ramos]

thank you! :)

[The Doctor]

Excellent job on articulating the song into your piece. I hope things get better than this for you. Keep up the good work.
-The Doctor

[Jas Alejandrino Ramos]

thank you! :)

[Inci 2]

Funny ...nice flow :))

[Jas Alejandrino Ramos]

thank you! :)

[Johnny Joe]

nice flow

[Jas Alejandrino Ramos]

thank you! :)

[Rusty]

A dizzy confusion of want hope despair and reticence.

[Camille Corbett]

Is this a song?

[Globy]

amazing flow. So fresh. well done Jas :)

Globy
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[Jas Alejandrino Ramos]

thank you Globy! :)

[Ama May Cooper]

A lovely little romance tail, of a crush. Sweet innocent.
The language seems a bit broken and misplaced, and the flows a little sketchy, some words appear to be missing.
I like the childishness about it, the way it seems almost as if a very young child is merely doting over there first crush.
Lovely

[Jas Alejandrino Ramos]

thank you for the review!:)