Emergence

My mind is so muddled up
It can't think of anything nor sum it up
Its spinning in circles, reaching no destination
My thoughts are lost, having no direction

They're like a whirlwind inside of me
They don't stop, they sunder me
It feels like I'll be down under a mound
Down dark, before I know what's wrong

I stagger, I can't focus
There's something, but it feels like I'm hocus
But I can feel it, if rather not see it
It guides me, our hands fit

Im blinded, I feel light
The soft hands guide me, and I sense their might
The view clears and I'm stunned awake
It's my world, the stars to take.

Author's Note

Sometimes is so happens that I cannot read a poem or a story beyond a few lines. It's simply because it does not interest me. If so is the case with my poems, do tell me so :) And of course honest reviews are appreciated!

Reviews

[KittyVenus]

one word can explain this:































AMAZING!!!

[xDalliance]

Haha, thank you so much!

[Surya pradha]

such rich stanzas. definitely worth a read.

[Zahra]

Very nicely penned and expressive.

[BlackRose]

Were trying to rhyme in the first two stanzas? Otherwise it just seems out of place with the last two. Otherwise your words and all are wonderfully done!

[Saddam]

Im blinded, I feel light
The soft hands guide me, and I sense their might
The view clears and I'm stunned awake
It's my world, the stars to take.

Well.... This is very nice write and such a beautiful write. You are really talented poet. I am looking more from you dear. Keep it up dear. Great write.

[xDalliance]

Thank you Saddam! Hum aapke bhi poems ka intezar karenge! :D

[Saddam]

you are welcome dear.

[Saddam]

Im blinded, I feel light
The soft hands guide me, and I sense their might
The view clears and I'm stunned awake
It's my world, the stars to take.

Well.... This is very nice write and such a beautiful write. You are really talented poet. I am looking more from you dear. Keep it up dear. Great write.

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

OMG, WOW! Such a talented write, loved it.

Kaze~

[xDalliance]

Haha thank you so much Kaze! :)

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Your very welcome my friend. :-)

[KWP]

Hey I like this ... it rather captivates me to tell you the truth... I like the essence and the murky clarity, if that makes sense...you have much depth in your mind, you could perhaps read it over a few times and change minor words here and there, I do like it very much though xx

[xDalliance]

Haha yes that does make sense! Yes I'll try to perfect it by rereading it. Thank you th0 means a lot coming from you! :)

[KWP]

you have many levels - i look forward to reading more xx

[xDalliance]

Thank you once again! :) I too look forward to read yours ^.^

[Vidya Bacchus]

Sometimes we are overwhelmed. By the world ,by life sometimes by the thought running through our head. Fine poetry J. Your poems hold my interest just fine :)

[xDalliance]

Thank you Vi! Haha I'm glad I don't have the power to disinterest people! :P :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Ha that is very funny.You are welcome hunny :)