Daddy's Little Girl

"A little girl's heart breaking"

Bitter reality sets in

As I realize this would be the end.

 

My little eyes stare down the hall

As I watch and I hear a marriage fall.

Hysterical cries and pleas

"Don't leave, please! Don't Leave!"

Banging and crashing falls free

As I sit in silence asking

"God, why me?"

"Does nobody know what is going on?

Can anybody help fix what went wrong?"

My tiny eyes begin to leak

Tears run down my cheeks.

I kneel at my bed and let my heart out

"I've never felt hurt before,

Whats this all about?"

I thought I was daddy's little girl, you see

So I don't get why he would just leave me.

Now mommy is crying

and I sit in my room, holding Mr. Lion, wondering what to do.

I slowly get up and walk to my mom

I may be little, but I know

Somethings really wrong.

"I love you mommy"

Is what I say and she turns to me and says

"Everything will be okay."

But years have past and still I hurt,

For my 7 year old heart had been left in the dirt.

It never came back and it never will.

I'm no longer,

'Daddy's little girl.'

Reviews

[Broken.]

This is indeed sad. Of course I can relate to it as well.
the point of view really helps the reader feel and see what the little girl os going through. Great write. :D

[-TweetyBirdd.!-]

i love this poem. i can feel the emotion and i love the way you capture it through a little kids eyes. also, i can relate. this poem is really good! (:

[snapstache]

i love this!
The emotion is set out very well.
I was about to cry cause I have a friend who wen through this.
Guess I never realized what she felt like.
Great Poem! *.*

[Coyote Poetry]

Yes I know the feeling of your poem. A young heart don't understand when the walls fall down in a marriage. Children pay the price of a bad separation. A sad and powerful poem.
Coyote

[The Reticent Receptioni..]

heartrending. good job. :)

[Wildecat]

This is really sad, sorry you had to go through this, a very good write.

[Eagle Cruagh]

One singular thought stands out above all
the rest.
This is not a memory. You have the ability to
see through the eyes of another, empathy.
You captured the essence of this small girl, this is
not memory, it may have happened to you, but you
are now mature and you can see.

This is the expression of the ability of a talented and
professional artist. Beautiful !

Thank you for the most touching thing I have read.

----- Eagle Cruagh

[larryb]

Just a plain simple great write this poem came together perfect and your way with words is outstanding :)

[Brjden (Bridge-Den) Cre..]

INCREDIBLE!!!! Jewels....You're dope! This piece is so sad and I know a lot of people can relate. Your attention to detail and the way you relay emotion is the best I've seen here so far. You're an incredible talent and I look forward to reading ALL of your work! Don't stop!

[ajasminewallflower]

I applaude you for really capturing the thoughts and feelings of a child caught in the night of a father's leaving.I think I definatly really like and apperciate this poem because I was around the same age when my parents divorced and now its been nine years since. Excellent job!