After The Sun Sets

"When you feel broken"

One day has come to an end

but you are left empty again.

You try to move by it.

You try to move on.

But this feeling is building

and getting so strong.

 

You close your eyes to the setting sun

But your day has really just begun.

You feel sorrow pulling your heart

Knocking and mocking

tearing violently apart.

 

The tears, they come easy

as you let yourself fall

back into your world

where theres nothing at all.

 

You don't have to pretend to be lonely

or broken inside

You don't have to hide from the lie

Thats undoubtedly your life.

 

What once was happiness

no longer is

But you continue to live...

 

...to breath

 

Just as is.

Reviews

[Butterflymom]

This is very lovely, well written, intense, and is beautiful in it's darkness. This was very well expressed.

[Vague]

I liked the rhythm, and the message you were conveying.

Feelings like this are why I write, and play. I wanna die happy, or some semblance of it.

But, we all tell ourselves that, huh?

Very nice work. :)

[Alaska Frost]

first off, i need to say how much i love the title "After The Sun Sets" ......... this poem had a very nice flow to it and a good rhyme scheme.... you captivated emotions when we feel broken and lost... Excellent work!

[AG]

direct to the point and very genuine.

i like how the words come together to create a form of expression like this.

with simple words, you sculpt inner feelings, an ability that most writers fail to capture.

very mature yet very theatrical. well done!