Longing

I wrote this for someone that I love very much.

Sheets of satin are encasing

vessels of beauty lie, waiting

intricate glass is stained red,

stasis in time, thirsty

...........drenched..........

identical black locks

the same snow-colored skin

kindred eyes

sand slips through the glass

falling, endlessly, without time

it fills the space inside,

weighs it down.  

the breath is getting shallow.

it scrapes together, they grate each other so.

tiny, miniscule molecules.  soft to the touch

but as a dull knife to the organs.

remove the space between,

expel what does not belong.

replace breathlessness with fresh air,

with that pure substance that is you.

replace longing with that 

large vessel for which I thirst.

replace this vapid atmosphere

with the scent of your skin

replace my pillow with your chest,

let insomnia disperse.

waves of sound calm the storm,

appeasing until you return.

I love you, therefore worry no more.

but replace the emptiness 

with a feast of the senses.

Reviews

[Barbara Walker]

Great metaphor in this. has a very sensuous feeling and languid flow. Enjoyed reading!

[M.M.I]

Playful comes to mind after reading this. It is an honest and sincere write. Thanks for sharing.

[zainul]

So sweet piece!
Love the amazing picture:
"sand slips through the glass

falling, endlessly, without time"

[Dezzyray]

it's so lovely and sweet! :D

[Crow]

Beautifully prosed imagery, accompanied by wonderfully provocative thought.

[Antonio Valentino]

awww what a lovely write, you could just feel the care and affection..

very sweet.
Anthony :)

[Tree Bark]

aw it's so sweet!

[Klyn]

Very nice.

[kurrupted]

Lovely and deep, I like the flow too.