Livid Fury: The Revenge of Benjamin Barker

An elegy for my creative writing class:)

Benjamin Barker, a man like all others

Fate lies in someone else's favor

Above his heart misfortune lurks, and danger hovers

 

 

A beautiful wife and daughter

A pompous man's perverted mind and heart

So begins Benjamin's slaughter

 

 

A simple stroll in town

Watchful eyes wait for that fate-filled moment

When Benjamin Barker is taken down

 

 

The eyes of London cry torrents of bitter tears

As rain pours from the angry sky

Both Earth and Heaven grieve for their barber of so many years

 

 

In an unjust prison cell he lays dying

Innocent and miserable, because he knows

That at home in London, his wife and baby sit crying

 

 

Many years pass and Benjamin Barker is dead

Though his body lives, his spirit is gone

In the place of a happy man dwells an angry soul, deranged in the head

 

 

His time in prison is carried out, and he is set free 
Yet when he roams about London, no one is aware 
His eyes and air are changed, so different is he 

 

A vengeful heart beats in his chest 
He claims he is Benjamin Barker no more 
Sweeney Todd is the name that fits best

 

 
In Benjamin's place a murderer lies 
The only thing he lends aid to 
Is Mrs. Lovett's meat pies

 

 

Sweeney sees the face of the man who was so unfair 
And sharpens his glittering cut-throat razors 
Waiting for the day that he might sit in his barber's chair

 

 
While he waits, his bloodlust begins 
All of London remains unaware that Benjamin Barker has returned 
And seeks revenge with his sharp little friends 

 

How wretched is this fate! 
That a man so beloved should become 
A man filled with hate

Reviews

[Anima Inspired]

An ode to an interesting film... This read very smoothly, and you managed to tell the tale of the movie in an almost "Burton-esque" manner, which was quite nice. I would have liked to have seen this broken in to stanzas, though, maybe after the line: Both Earth and Heaven grieve for their barber of so many years and again after the line: Sweeney Todd is the name that fits best I just think that this would give the piece a more "three act" feel, which would fit better with the idea of the story. Nicely done, though!

[Stephanie]

I love this! Sweeney Todd is such a dark, ominous movie and I think you captured it well :) Very creative and fun. Awesome!

[Eric Cox]

A very well written poem. Cool.

[{Rated Vee For FAMOUS}]

its a great read, and i think you should send it to the director of the movie oreven johnnie depp...
thats amazing, you are very perceptive....
.... shamefully i admit i never saw the movie :|
but now i know what goes on...
spoiler lol....

[These Haunted Hallways]

Frightfully heinous stuff lol. Truly, ive never seen the movie yet, but i'll take your word for it if it's a great movie to see lol. Devilishly brilliant poem!

B.A.

[Kira Sukame]

very nice i like it but some of the words i dont get but its just me :P but its very good :D

[*~Imperfectly Me~*]

Oh how i loved that movie and soundtrack... *starts singing "they all deserve to die..."* Sorry, musical moment.. This was pretty good I agree with Anima Inspired that it would have been better broken up into stanza's. It helps the reader read it without having to focus our eyes so much. The story telling part of the poem was very good however to me it kind of felt forced not alot of flow came across to me. Anyway, this was wonderful. I love the inspiration this poem came from and what it inspires. Great Job!

[Amanda]

what a wicked write! i like the way it flows and follows a story type line.

you did a nice job on this, Heather :)

Always,

Amanda