The Point?

Huddled in the corner of an alleyway

I sit there on the ground,

The cold, barren ground

It matches my soul.

 

It is pitch black

The only light comes from the still, subtle moon

 

I see few people walk by,

I hear the somewhat faint, distant voices,

I sit and wait if I can hear someone calling my name

Wondering where I am.

 

But I hear nothing,

Nothing at all it is dead, complete silence

I hope, wish, pray

That I would hear someone calling my name.

 

Hoping someone would be looking for me

Anyone that cares,

Or even cared about me

Wondering where I could be.

 

But yet just as I expected,

 I hear nothing

No voices, no sounds

Nothing, as if the whole world has disappeared

Left me here to fend for myself

 

I knew that no one cared

If someone did I would hear their voice

Calling my name

Out in the streets looking,

Worrying

 

Still hoping

But nothing

So what’s the point of hoping

Exactly there isn’t a point

So I stop…

 

 

Reviews

[E. R. Rawding]

wow, that's all i can say

[Kanattas Atir Enomo]

this piece was full of emotion and you did a great a job at describing this in a believable manner. it's a beautiful poem that conveyed a great message. i could really feel the longing in it.

[r]

this definately tels a story

[Coyote Poetry]

You are a outstanding writer. The story you create is powerful. I could feel the emotion of wanting help and giving up in your words. A complete story of disappointment in so few words. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Steve]

dont stop......that would not be good.

I like how this is written. Very thoughtful and real. I have known some who have felt this way and its a little scary to get to that point.

This is a powerful write!

[*Always be Me:)*]

Awesome poem.
Like PoppySilver said,
there is light in the darkness sweetie.
Good job though,
I liked it.

[Ruth]

There is always light in the darkness hon! This is a really moving poem! Awesome! xx

[Beatles9322]

This is so awesome! You deliver your point perfectly and I understand what you mean. We all feel this way at some point in our lives and the fantastic flow that filled this piece of art was fabulous. :D

[Dakota]

I don't see how anyone can miss the message you're shouting here! I think we've all been at a point like this in our lives, and kudos to you for being brave enough to write it! Great piece!

[[KL]]

This is a great piece... It has a good flow, blank verse as well which is something I enjoy reading. A very good write.. =D