When

When

A Poem by Jester

If things were real, you'd be here
If things went right, you'd be near
If I was strong, we'd be forever
And when I am, we'll be together.

© 2013 Jester


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I love the tight structure and the symmetry of this one. So well said in four lines.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nice little write darlin. Put some spurs on your spirit and I think you'll do it just fine.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Ty
Very on point. Made me smile.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Wow! 44 views! I'm so excited! ^_^

Thank you everyone for your kind reviews. I'm very pleased, and appreciate it so very much.



Posted 11 Years Ago


Very cute

Posted 11 Years Ago


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ron
Wow that completely awesome.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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TLK
It's not just about you ("If I was strong"). A we has multiple personages in it. If you are strong all the time, you allow the others to be weak.

Posted 11 Years Ago



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Added on February 28, 2013
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