My Best Friend, The Beeping

I spent alot of time in and out of hospitals. So I write about it.

It's a world of questions in here

bright lights that should give them answers

a whirling dervish of shuffling foot steps and blurring white coats

clipboards and click pens

I get it, you think i'm holding something back, some missing biological puzzle piece.

Well I'm not...

It's a place of metaphors this glass enclosed room with cheap white curtains

a rolling bed but I thought you were supposed to "STAY" in bed, so what's with the wheels

my own entourage of smiling faces and nodding heads

one more test and this will only hurt a little bit

You ever had an arm set, if it was like that times 10 would you let them do it again

Well I'm not...

It's a coffin with spotless and shiny tile floors

Scalpels, MRI's, and microscopic cameras searching but still can't find

their grim looks when they think I'm asleep and thinking my mother and father would lie to me

I know I'm not okay and I know you tell them it might stay that way

They are preparing for goodbyes, forgetting I am still right here

Well I'm not!

Not yet...

Author's Note

Hit me so to speak<3

Reviews

[Jupiter]

Nice piece, Jessica. It is an interesting prospective on the view of being in and out of hospitals. I wish I had more to offer but this is honestly not a piece I can personally relate to. I do like the flow and feelings of strength and perseverance though.

Jupiter

[Jessica Gillitzer]

Thanks Jupiter I am glad you liked it. I would tell you to consider yourself blessed in that sense.
Jessie

[Robbie~xoxo~]

WOW!... you have conveyed a scenario which I am quite familiar with... have been there so many times...
You have written this journey well...Impressive piece!..

Keep up the good work. :)

[Jessica Gillitzer]

It's good to know were not alone. Life is to short for focusing on it, but I had to get it off my chest. I will try to keep it up.
Jessie

[unsavable_soul]

Very exceptional piece,
It is strong and beautiful in it's ending against the odds, yet sad and full of mental imagery in it's body. Your take on hospital life is very direct and wrought with emotion. I would say there is so much honesty in this piece it is almost to much so. Very, very nice piece of art. My regret for your suffering is ample as well, I can't say hospitals were much a part of my life. I wish you best of health now though.
Sincerely
Christopher

[unsavable_soul]

Sorry for my lack of decent critique and my siding more completely on opinion. I find James Hanna-Magill and TLK to be some of the stronger critical eye reviewers I would seek their critique for both support and feed back that helps. They are some of the best I have seen. I say this for future reference as I didn't pay attention to any details on this one, couldn't really.
Chris

[Jessica Gillitzer]

Thanks I am thankful to have so many people enjoying more work. I got a review from TLK on my other piece it was loaded with good stuff but i don't know who James is yet. thanks for the suggestions on good people to help me with my writing. Oh, by the way I like your comments too.

[unsavable_soul]

Your welcome,
I figured you look like you want to grow so I will send you to people who are good at helping with such things. Best of luck.
Christopher

[M Sanders]

The way you discribed this allows me place myself there. I smell it, I see it, imagining the objects one would see at the hospital. The worry that rises in those that love you, needing to prepare for the worst. Good job, great discriptions, depth and reality.

Your friend
M

[Jessica Gillitzer]

Thanks M you are so nice, I am very glad we met.

[Talal Hussain]

Its a wondeful write Jessica, a composition coming straight from the heart...i am not familiar with this writing style...but it does not matter..loved it :-)

[Jessica Gillitzer]

I don't know if it has a style english class was never a strong suit for me. I am so glad you like it though.

[Anastassia.S]

I love that you write in not's and not yet's. They're soo interchangeable. Good work! :)

[Jessica Gillitzer]

Thanks Anastassia I appreciate feeling i get something across. Grammar sometimes stinks but I try.

[larryb]

Im not very talented myself so trying to find things wrong with this piece is hard....it seems to come straight from the heart and thats the best kind of writes...you are a braveheart Jessie and your attitude of life is amasing...keep your head up .

[Jessica Gillitzer]

thanks bunches. I have been doing better for quite a while I really like all the support i get here, I have to spend some time reading more, I just get so busy these days with this and that I can't seem to get more than a couple minutes to myself. i always try to keep my head up I find that no one else can really do it for me.
Jessie