Personal Ad

I want to borrow his books

and admire his scribbles in his

notebook margins-

steal sips from his coffee 

and trace his scars.

and he can perch himself on the

kitchen counter, discussing plans

we will never keep while I

chop vegetables for dinner-

and we can kiss for no reason 

and waste far too many hours cuddled

close in cold movie theatres 

and not nearly enough

climbing mountains 

or the corporate ladder-

And he will love the smell 

of ocean in my hair

and have to reset the timer 

on the microwave when someone took it out

before letting it finish-

and he will want to rescue 

unwanted animals- finding something

kindred in how he used to feel-

like me

before we found each other.

"personal ad"- 10-17-13-jessicagadziala

Reviews

[bobc]

J..a finely crafted poem here. A very nice read expressing the ease of a passionate relationship between two people who feel so at ease with each other. Thanx for posting...bobc

[Kat]

Aw, I really like this poem! It seems so sincere and real to me. Awesome job :D

[Briony Bryant]

The fact that this poem is free verse makes it so much more personal. I love the lines "steal sips of his coffee and trace his scars" really lovely poem!

[Simon Welsh]

Love the structure and set up. Nice.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

another sensitive and highly intelligent thinkers poem

[Relic]

I love the poem and the thinking form you used. I'm not sure if I've seen a poem written with the idea of it being a personal ad. The line breaks seem a little off to me in spots but maybe that's just me. Overall, nice writing that shows maturity.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

The way this goes about the lines --- free versed and no inhibitions makes for a read --- the flow of the whole write --- as a reader details the account of the verse... --- you take us into your world and unfolds from start to finish....like the title of this...put everything together...